All Comments on 'Stormy Camping Trip Ch. 01'

More please.

That's all there is?

Eh

great start!!

Excitingly written and well plotted. Would love to read more stories from this author. Congrats.

Ok... lets see what your little strumpet has learned in school about pleasing a man.

What a great story of daddy/daughter love. I wonder how many times the dad will re-enter his little girl over the next few days. With no condoms it will be inevitable that dad will fill his daughters tight little pussy with more seed. When these two return home they will return home as more than just daddy/daughter they will return as lovers. When dad looks across the dinner table at his little girl he will remember how beautiful she looked as her face contorted in orgasm and how sexy her pert breasts and tight ass looked naked. like a moth to a flame, daddy will be getting his daughter alone again and again and she will be moaning in orgasm as daddy ruts inside her fertile womb again and again.

Great start to hopefully an ongoing fuckfest.

This is one of he best stories I have read and I hope Kelly gets to experience many sex lessons as the story unfolds.

Keep her cumming.

It's spelled honey. Minor but irritating.

But it's similar to at least a dozen or so other stories where environmental circumstances bring two family members together and inevitably, nature takes its course. These two seemed too comfortable with the incest for a first time and Kelly was described as far too sexually experienced for a virgin. Enough for 4* but needed more originality for 5.

Listen' I appreciate ur lack of excessive swearing and plain lewd/crass dialouge but its needs more content,backstory and SOME attempt at emotions. Maybe ur knew to this so i'll tell u a few things i look for in these stories:

1. Shoot for 2-3 page stories MAX (4+ pages gets boring and repetitive)

2. BASIC REALISM is a must to suspend disbelief, especially in this genre. Virgins almost NEVER get on top their 1st time simply because they DONT KNOW WHAT THEYRE DOING!!!!! Just follow basic logic and common sense.

3.Need to add emotion to the dialouge between characters. No need to get super fancy (at least not in ur first attempts) just enuff to make us "feel" with the characters on the basic levels.

They sure dried off quickly. Too bad about his tent. They would have had more room to do whatever was omitted between their getting soaking wet and him trying not to fuck his obnoxiously horny daughter. And, yes, wifey/mommy is gonna know they done it as soon as they get home. She won't have to wait for supper table looks.

She'll have to ask about their tent, too, if she helps unpack or whenever she starts to prepare for their next camping trip. Maybe she'll pack an ax, depending on how quickly she puts two and two together.

Either way, she'll know pretty soon. She probably won't have to wait for the hysterics when daughter misses her next period. If she's a fairly good guesser, it'l be when daughter climbs into bed with them, and not on her side.... It may even be sooner, like when daughter gets goo-goo eyed and starts talking funny when daddy is around....

Wow, the horny girl takes a little fucking initiative, like a guy might, and suddenly the story is unbelievable! She's (suppisedly) over 18, living in the internet age with friends that talk about sex all the time. Hell, if I was a guy, even first time, I think after doing it from behind for a bit I would want to switch to some position where I could get in deeper and actually move better, no reason why she cant think the same thing!

Over all I thought the first chapter was pretty good! I dont need a bunch of pages with back story bullshit, nor do I need them spouting a bunch more shit while they're freezing their asses off and warming up and feeling each other up. (Oh daddy, ive always wanted to do you! Oh baby, I think about fucking you every time I see those sweet tits!)

It was good enough and worked fine, heh.

Made me hard