All Comments on 'Stormy Ch. 01'

Dude! That was so awesome!!! please continue!!

Nice! Let's hear more from this...

A super start and a very loving story.

I can't understand why they wouldn't even try to have children.

She could get pregnant and if something would be wrong with the baby then they could get it aborted..

Thanks for the great read.

Perfectly done! I am glad you are bringing Mike and Stormy in on Iron Bitch, and am looking forward to their story continuing!

Along with your standard misuse of grammar, spelling and sentence structure we have Mike's mom not knowing she was pregnant with twins?

Really?

I had to stop at that point

Where were they? Certainly was NOT anywhere in the US or the rest of the develped world

I cannot believe the lengths you will go to in asking us to suspend belief in order to get your "plots" along. I know it was naive, but I had hoped that this series would be different

and we know so little about them

I don't know why anyone would call this story weird. It's very well written. I can't wait for the next chapter.

although you knew where it was headed - the nurse was a very clever twist. and the sex at the end was great.

Hold on a second here.

A woman carrying twins, not knowing? or when the other twin "disappears" doesn't care?

or just gave up one of her children because someone else lost his wife?

That doesn't make sense at all.

I'm open to a lot, also Fiction in Stories (besides the Sci-fi section in Literotica, like impossible stamina and endowments in other stories on here),

but what you implemented was just a huge logical Failure.

This should've been addressed immediately in this chapter, not in the following Chapters because you run the very possible risk to lose a reader with such a mistake.

Like me, I won't continue here.