All Comments on 'Story of April'

Mixed feelings.

+++++ plot ideas are good, I did not notice any big holes in it. Combines credibility, sex fantasy and social realism traditions. Sadly, today a sadistic pimp and dirty cop are credible last resort helpers while supposed safe rocks like family values and "well-intentioned" government institutions indeed often disappoint and, even worse, add to the damage.

+++++ what a long tale - and never boring, full of surprises and well done little scenes. no rut of boring more of the same that is a frequent pitfall of long degradation tales

--- The editing often distracts, interrupts reading flow. … mmh makes no sense … what similar words could have been intended by the author? … mmh might make sene … oh actually would make the short scene very nice, good idea …

One suggestion: instead of one chapter with 19 pages divide it into smaller chapters. stretch publishing it over time – hopefully with better better editing for smaller bits.

thanks and best wishes, Simon