All Comments on 'Strange Car in the Driveway - A Sequel'

I don't like sequels, but this one was pretty good. 5 stars

As with Agena's The Joke, there can definitely be an interesting story behind a wife trying to convince her husband that she is having sex with another man. How does the husband deal with his feelings when his rational mind knows nothing actually happened but the emotions he felt were real. However, such a story is beyond your ability so instead lets go with the standard tropes. Cocaine and roofies, gee, what did Reg and Penny have planned? And the wife is really a narcissist. Funny, she came across as someone who entirely unsure of herself in the original story. Pretty much the opposite of an narcissist.

My disappointment is minimal as there wasn't passion or seduction. I am not normally one to read a story that drags on and on without sexual excitement. But i found that i read this story to its entirety. Very wonderful story. I am impressed. Lots of twists and very dramatic. Good Job

....You took several small little points that bothered me in the original story and highlighted them.

Yes it was a bit over the top but it was interesting to see where you took it.

Thank you.

And dramatic as hell, lol.

I agree with sbrooks103x

comments (criticism?).

Always love his "Thoughts", lol.

Vera's character might be

stretched to fit this ending,

but from edrider's story,

Karen the boss sounds more

like a victim to a prank,

than a bad person.

And I object to Gary's meeting

with Thomas the morning after

after that shocking day!

Sure, let him send a copy

of the letter to Thomas.

But give him a day to recuperate

and drink his marriage goodbye.

(Idea coming from Charlie Daniels

song "Drinking My Baby Goodbye", lol)

This story is well written sequel

and a fun read.

Top ratings from me.

Thanks MattblackUK!

Sorry, but you have taken a grate story with so much potential & turned it into a tail of self centered convenience.

She didn't cheat. There was no affair, so his reaction was over the top. He breaks up his family over a story, a play.

That being said, Vera is better off without him. If this is how he heaves when confronted by a school assignment then how would he react when shit really goes down?

This was worse than the original.

At first I thought so. It is so disjointed and stupid that it couldn’t be anything but garbage. Then I read where someone mentioned satire. That is the only thing this story could qualify for.

the funniest line in the story? "How could such an evil scheme be perpetrated without any malice?" By stupidity.

His wife wasn’t cruel. Just stupid. His reaction was so far over the top to not be believable. She never cheated. It was just a ‘practical joke" that was stupid. He should have been angry and she should have had to pay a price but to destroy your family over this is ridiculous.

Also, to abandon a sick wife like that show a real lack of character in him. Of course, where did the mental illness come from. That just seems to have come out of MB’s ass as there was nothing in the story to indicate she was mentally ill.

Just a waste of writing skill.

There seems to be a little contradiction in Karen's attitude between Vera's description of her willingness to participate, and Karen's explanation to Thomas.

Trust is a fragile thing, and once broken can never be fully repaired. That alone would be reason enough to dump the bitch. Do I have a problem with her being portrayed in this story as mentally I'll? No! I think anyone who could do such a thing as she did to her husband has mental issues. The gun and drug issues were just added plot issues that helped point the way to Reg and Penny having deeper reasons for using their influence on the wife than were apparent at the beginning.

Sometimes the world is a shitty place. Sometimes the good guy wins. Sometimes an author writes a story where these two things collide with as happy a result as is possible given the situation. Obviously I enjoyed reading this story, but more that it had a decent ending rather than it was entertaining, although it was that, for myself at least. I only wish more authors would take a chance at putting a better ending to some of the stories that have appeared on literotica over the years.

You should have left the story alone - and submitted something worth reading

I did read two or three edrider73 stories many years ago.

Found them depressing, disgusting, and needlessly cruel. Definitely not entertaining too me. Sounds like "Strange Car in the Driveway " was more of the same,😲. Not surprised, lol.

MattblackUK writes about the consequences. I bet very different from the original story 😅. Not a lot of substance here, so I gave you 2*s.

Your original stories are put together better, more substantial.

Thanks for the effort MattblackUK.

AMerryman

You should have left it alone. The original was at least imaginative. This is hackneyed, smug and self-righteous.

The best you can do to a rebuttal/extension to an Edrider story is try to tell us that the wife is a psycho?!?!

LOL that’s the point of that author’s stories.

At least Ed is original...brutal, violent, sick...but original.

You are not.

I liked the first part, but when you got to the part in the story where the gun was reported stolen it started falling apart. You changed from showing to telling, and the divorce/ psychological report was verging on and subsequently blowing past ridiculous.

to a strange story.

Gary and Vera had three children, Reg and Penny had two children. It was the children of Reg and Penny who stayed with Penny's mother.

Also, "This ending is so full of holes and weird" Vera's story was not the dream of a psychiatrist. The story ended in the way it started because I was using that as a device to indicate that, having messed her own life up so badly, Vera was stuck in a secure psychiatric hospital.

I don't remember Penny and Vera being related. Why would Vera's children need to stay with Penny's mother?

this ending just doesn't cut it. All of a sudden she is a shrinks dream . To much phyco Babel . And a worse ending.

Vera is mentally ill not a cheating bitch. This story needs a more defined ending with Vera getting the help she needs and Reg and his wife in jail.

And as your story illustrates, most experiments fail. That is too harsh a verdict for this exercise. I can relate to Gary's reaction, but no more so than if he decided to accept Vera's experiment as just a very poorly thought out failure. Divorce is a good way to end a toxic relationship, but a stupid way to punish someone you still love.

Vera was really really stupid. It would take more background information to decide her experiment was conducted with cruelty and malice. Making her a psychopath was contrived to help justify Gary's extreme reaction to her actions. But it was needed to keep Gary from looking like the complete villain.

Overall an outrageous and over the top extension of the story line, which is your choice. I thought the original was better without this odd sequel. But I do appreciate your efforts.

thanks

Really overlooked that part about Karen.

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This is so far over the top it's more of a satire than a sequel.

Found the story very entertaining.

Thank you for writing and looking forward to reading more from you.

because is real life people with money can do anything they want, just listen to Prev. Trump that he could shot someone and not loose a vote.. Since Reg and Penny had lots of money, I do not see this story happen.

Date rape drugs and mental health issues are typically introduced as excuses for someone's misdeeds. Would have been better to not have them and just have the kids hate their mom for what she did to their dad and become too hostile toward her to remain in her custody.

Most refreshing; someone with a brain and new ideas. Most of the so called authors on her simply try to find a new way of eating someone else's cum without sucking a dick. Lamb duck want to be fags. Great work keep writing.

....To a tale of horrendous cruelty! Vera was truly a monster who earned everything that came to her in this sequel. IMO, the only thing that could have made it worse would be to actually have fucked Reg.

Thanks very much for this one. Five big ones from here!

Get your facts or terminology straight. A person receiving a six month sentence it is not for prison but for jail. In this case since they had another sentence for over a year they would run concurrently in the facility of the longer sentence.

“Just another sick fetish story to appease the B.T.B”

How about you go eat a cream piew,

4* for a this story Matt

I had edrider confused with Mostera1. Sorry for the mistake. Sorry Ed.

HR's only involvement with promotions is processing the paperwork. They wouldn't even know anything about it until they got the form signed by the manager.

Very few businesses still have "moral turpitude" in their employment terms. But firing for "gross misconduct" is plausible enough.

The question of Karen's guilt was clarified by inserting the delay in advising the gentleman to be promoted. At least the author did not decide to kill Vera in a nice auto accident....

When I first read the original I wanted to strangle Vera myself. The other endings were about what you would expect. When I first looked to see how the voting was going I decided what the heck go ahead and read it.

I was in agreement with everything up until the firing of Karen and the confrontation of Vera, Reg and Penny (I don't remember where she came from). The holding back on his promotion would have been something H/R would have been involved in not just Karen. I would have believed a demotion not termination would have worked better that way if she didn't like it she could quit and the company would have been in a better position.

It as still a good read compared to most of the other stories being posted lately.

but i do think alone and miserable would have been a more fitting conclusion than insanity

The original was very unsatisfying as it left the matter as a fait accompli. Vera's take on her actions was just the way things would be and she would wait until he was done being pissed off at her and come crawling back. Gary is left destroyed and impotent.

While the wrapping was very creative, the concept is the classic superior woman claiming the right to do whatever she wants to do and the husband just having to accept it. Usually it's one time affair that the wife MUST have and the husband will just have to deal with.

Was this follow-up over the top? Well, certainly all the pieces were neatly arranged to inflict maximum pain on Vera and her co-conspirators. However, nothing is that far from reality. Is it possible that his company's boss is a good guy that doesn't want his managers taking actions that could damage his company? Sure. Could cops be worried about a stolen gun and insist on a search? Sure. Is it possible that a stock broker could have drugs in his car? Sure. Is it possible that a supremely arrogant Vera has psychological problems? Sure. Could a judge be worried about an unstable mother taking care of her kids? Sure.

Are all these things perfectly arranged and amplified to result in a BTB story? Of COURSE they are. Just like the original was very carefully arranged to give Vera what she wanted. The first may have been a better story on creative merits than this one but I found this one more satisfying.

As has already been pointed out more research was needed when writing about US vs UK systems. ATF responding on a single .38 revolver that has not been used in a major act yet? I gave the story 3*

I think there are limits to "in sickness and in health" when the sickness is taken out on the partner.

If he got the promotion a couple of months ago, why hasn't Karen told him about it? Surely this scheme hasn't been in the works that long?

"she allowed herself a chuckle at that idea" - Karen finds it amusing that Gary might not be up for work after what happened?

"I helped her because I didn't think Gary was ready for his promotion!" - Then she should have said that to Thomas! He's HER boss, it's not her place to overrule his personnel decisions.

LOL, Karen was hoist on her own petard!

Since Vera obviously had the combination to the safe, she presumably had legal access to the gun, how much trouble could she really be in? She had a legitimate excuse for wanting to get the gun out of the house.

"setting her husband up to make him think that she was having an affair and then accusing him of being paranoid" - That doesn't sound familiar to me.

I think the mental illness was a little bit too much of a Deus ex Machina.

Well, I can't say I wouldn't but it would take something extreme. Certainly if she was laughing with her co-conspirators, it would probably be a done deal. Even after a night away, she seems fully justified in the pain she caused and remorseless.

Which speaks to the poor writing in THE ORIGINAL STORY. Edrider doesn't seem to be all quite there. He still defends the actions of the original wife.

How is love not reciprocal? As stated in my story "Dear Andrea", if HE loves HER, he should get over it. If SHE loved HIM...she never would have done it in the first place! Or at least let him do anything he needed to do to put his pain away.

I can see a man not divorcing his wife over this. But I see a marriage limping along for a long time after that. And she would never take another class as long as he lived.

Matt outlined it wonderfully: if this is the amount of pain she is willing to do to him when she is over the moon in love with him, God help him if she ever hated him! He mirrored my feelings exactly.

After meeting Reg and Penny, I'm sorry but this story veered hard into Never Never land. It was well written, but it strained credulity.

And frankly, it's quite unrealistic. I get that your opinion of what she did was cruel, and it is, but not nearly to this degree. The letter clearly shows concern for what she was doing and his mental state.

I'd be angry, but I wouldn't want a divorce. And I don't think most husbands would. And certainly the letter doesn't show severe mental illness.

Overall, I'd say that the characters from your story are only superficially related to the previous, and much better, story. This reads more like wish-fulfillment for a revenge story than an genuine continuation of that. And while I do enjoy good BTB stories, I didn't enjoy this one.

Better than the original if a little over the top but fun

tasty creampies for you closet cuckies, slurp them up :)

Thanks, your follow up is as good, if not better than the original.

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This was also the best follow up . Well done. 5 stars.

.... the Sick, Degenerate,Cream Pie Eating Fetish trash that the CuckyBoy's love.

Five stars!

Was riding along with you and liking your driving until Vera was taken down as far as she was.

Reg and Penny seemed a little over the top with all.the drugs but what happened with Vera soured me a little.

She certainly deserved repercussions as did Reg and Penny. It seemed a bit much though.

Had fun and thank you!

Fair story continuation but a bit more research into psychopathology, forensics, and commitment procedures would help. Made my teeth grind together.

And highly unrealistic. Although what the wife did was kind of fucked up, I saw it as nothing more than a poor practical joke. If you left your wife and family over that, you really didn't love her in the first place. Some people have serious emotional issues and will Burn a Bitch over anything. 😂😂

I mean, I'm still pretty fucking bitter towards my ex-wife who pulled some epic fucked up shit, but WOW, the bitterness in this story gives me chills.

... "Emotional Support", where authors and readers can go to work through their bitterness around their divorces, whilst Loving Wives remains for those readers just interested in Erotica.

Reasonably well written tedium.

We have been in email communication this past week.

The best sequel of @edrider73's story...At least it didn't change the behaving of the original characters and touched the main point of her character: She wasn't a fit mother...4*

the fattest cock smoked, a cornhole buggered, betrayed!

not only well written, but well constructed to deal with the her mental illness, and she was an evil bitch mental illness not with standing. Best follow up ive read in a while. ed would be pleased I think

Great finish to the disturbing actions by the "crazy lady." Sorry edriders not alive to read this.

Five Stars

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Though I feel it played too much to the psychiatric nature of Vera's actions. Though, admittedly, odd or unusual occurrences are what often make good storytelling. An "evil" mother, locking her beautiful daughter in a tower, who grows her hair so long it reaches the ground outside. A sad sack little boy, who time after time after time tries to kick the football out of the neighbor girl's hands, never learning. A wartime dog, who heroically knows the live grenade thrown at his master is a bad thing, and carries it away from the troops. Etc. "Unusual" often makes for a good story. Perhaps only film noir is about plain ordinary mundane people, and their mundane thankless lives, having plain ordinary occurrences (or not occur as the case may be) that doesn't encrich their existence one iota is considered interesting... by some.

It is a good divergence from where edrider had lead his story, where the protagonist suffers, with no apparent pain to the agonists. Something I dislike about the end of a lot of his/her stories. Usually a nice story and interesting plot for 90% of the story (which is why I continued reading them), with a zonker of an end. This was a "good" twist, just a little bit unrefined. Of special note is the stilted dialogue (not the only person who does this, but it's a pet peeve of mine, along with homophonic spelling errors), which some additional editing might have helped.

Still, a good read, and an easy 4-stars

unite!

Thank you for giving me a different ending to that horror of a story. Really, I feel better now.

I always wondered where this could go. I've seen a couple of takes, and this is a good one. Five stars from me. Thanks for writing, Randi.

Have to ask though, where is the "in sickness and in health"? They are admitting her for mental health problems. She is sick. He is the bad guy in this. What will he tell his kids in a few years when they ask why he bailed on their sick mom? Not much love or compassion for a sick wife!

This was good, and a great what happened next story.

Almost all of Edriders stories peeve me off beyond belief and end before the wounded party ever has a chance to truly react once they are free(a lot of guys are tied up and tortured). I think it's because even the author knows that there's no getting past whats been done. This sequel was marvelous in my opinion, maybe a tad overboard with the schizophrenia and drug possessions but it certainly made me feel a lot better. 5 stars from me.