All Comments on 'Strangers Ch. 03'

beat his ass in a ally with a hood on.

I hate it when the characters are both dumber than rocks. There was nothing interesting or entertaining about this lunacy. BAH!

One time you said mike when you meant tom and another time you said sadie instead of sally.

re-read your work and do not rely on spell check. You had many wrong words, etc. and they made it a bit harder to read than necessary, and made it distracting.

wrong names and words, really breaks the flow, too bad since the plot seems decent.

Plain awful story, just awful!

1/5

Well, a very hot, but unfinished, story. The leadup in chapter 1, then the second time with Mike where Tom saw it all, then to the rape of Sally (and Jennifer) was totally plausible. There should have been another chapter to find out what happened after Sally woke up. Yeah, there are a few name changes but overall a very good story. Too bad it feels unfinished.