All Comments on 'Strip Hearts Ch. 05'

and compacted them all into edits so the story should flow a lot better... maybe.

lol talk about a disastrous start to a story. ah well.

Your posts need to be longer or you will lose the interest of the readers

you should make it much longer.. i'm getting bored with the story.

Having never submitted stories it sounds as if from your other comments that it takes a while for a submitted story to post. If you have submitted all the chapters then I guess we can just endure these very short segments. If you have not yet submitted all the chapters, then please lengthen it. I do like the story though.

are that the Chap[ters are too short. it was O.K. when you were doing the Build up. but to continue will only lead people to stop reading and looking for longer stories to read.

I've written 12 (short) parts, and planned for about 20 (short) parts. I submitted the first 10 all in one go, and then realized after the first couple of chapters that it really sucked as it was so slow. too late to edit the first two, i put the remaining 9 as edits and will submit the rest of the 20 (short) parts in to longer chapters.

tl;dr version - ch. 3-5 resubmitted as edits, ch 6-8 to be submitted, all are much longer.

All the previous comments seem to relate to the unedited version – I'm not certain if they can be deleted, but it would certainly clarify the position if they can, as it is now a reasonable length.

Great edit improvement and love the series! Ignore my old remarks.

... is the worst of your criticism, then KUDOS!

I'm enjoying your writing and your story.

Keep it up

~P