by MickeyPink
There is no reason for Gabriel to deal with Zoey. I hope he doesn't. Zoey is stupid and not worth it. Maybe she can fade away and another, more deserving lady can come is and take over the heroine's role in this story. I'm just saying. Zoey is bad business.
So in which chapter do Bramble and Horn boy duke it out (literaly) ? This thing must almost write itself zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
You've made your female lead character look virtually worthless. What man with self respect wants a woman like that? Perhaps some people like reading about people this morally flawed, but I don't know why they would.
Liked the fact that she found the guts to tell him the truth even though she was afraid. And people make mistakes. It's human. Hopefully, sexy Gabriel will be able to understand that. At least Zoe learned her lesson though. Great story. Thanks for sharing.
I must say I love this story! It just seems so real and refreshing to read. Plus, I disagree with the assessment of Zoey being worthless now. I think we are so used to seeing female characters in two spectrum on this site, either they are extremely whorish/slutty or they are perfect/or rarely flawed. I love the fact that Zoey is realistic and going through the motions and that she struggles and makes mistakes like women do! I’ am sick of the nearly perfect female protagonist; besides is she and Gabriel technically “together” anyway? Keep up the good work and I wish Zoey would have slapped the crap out of the cashier…lol. Can’t wait for the next installment!
okay didnt see that coming her sleeping with Briar wow ready for more now please
'Struggling' my ass. I do not feel a bit sorry for her. She is a DOUCHE!
GABRIEL!!! RUN AWAAAYYY!!!! THAT CUN*cough*T IS NOT WORTH IT!!
UGH! I don't feel sorry for her one little bit, she is intelligent, so have her use her brain for once, for someone so intelligent and has been hurt by the asshole over and over again she should be smart enough not to let it happen again.
I didnt see her sleeping with briar at all!!! Ughhh i love this story and cant wait for more. Please dont let those stupid comments keep you from writing more..oohh im wondering what Gabriel will say??? Will he walk away??
I'm annoyed with Zoey for being weak. She let her guard down so easily for that jerk and now she has to explain to Gabriel what happened. I don't feel sorry for her at all. Great Update--i can't wait to read more.
"Shit, Dad! They got Patrick. Ain't you watchin'?!"
But for real... Chump move, Briar. I keep thinking of the Fox and the Hound everytime I read that name. Briar. Affectations, gotta love em.
You all have obviously never been in a relationship with someone who is a manipulative bad boy. Keep in mind she is 'struggling'.. shes probably confused with 'Gabriel the angel' and had a relapse into what she knows even though she knows shes thru with him. Hopefully we will see her get stronger and Gabriel will understand and Hopefully shes not pregnant with that jerk's baby! LOVE your writing style.. its a very believable plot. Cant wait for the next chapter...
that stupid whore bag why she had to go get drunk u see this why i dont drink im so mad
PLEASE DONT LET HER GET PREGNANT FOR BRIAR!
That Would ruin the story for me!
Gabriel really can't trust her, not with Blair and he can't blame Blair. I want to chalk this up to her being drunk...but I can't. She knew what she was going into and then to get drunk. Right now I'm thinking she deserves to be with Blair. Hope I'm proven wrong and she gets a backbone.
I enjoyed reading all the chapters. I loved the realism you added to the story. I can't wait to see what happens with Gabriel and Zoey.
And I hope Gabriel sees that she was drunk and got taken advantage of! I hope he understands and forgives her!
I'm always amused how people comment on the content of interracial stories instead of the writing style or the enjoyability factor. With that being said, I'm an African-American (Black) lady who finds the anticipation palpable. You are truly a gifted writer and I'm truly anticipating the next chapter. I won't give you any tips on how to further your story line, but I will say that I thoroughly enjoyed your writing!
I really hope that she is not pregnant..she got her moment of clarity to late. I am glad she finally sees Briar for what he really is, but I hate that she fell for his bull crap. I hope Gabriel understands and does not get to angry, I like them together.
2 bottles of vodka and they drove? how big were the bottles? I second another comment, she is just a slut.
Stop being so harsh. Seriously no need to call her a slut. You're meant give constructive criticism not harsh comments
That moment when she gives in to her ex is so real. That feeling of wanting to get back to a place where you just feel normal, even if that feeling isn't real and wasn't real when you were with that person. The amazing part is that Zoey didn't just give in and give herself up to that "fake" feeling, she woke up. Great job what a beautiful story and a wonderful gift you have in sharing it with all of us readers. Amazing I cannot wait to read more of this story an anything else you write.