by dispatchprime
If you consider this to be "incoherent", then I can't wait to read your more polished work. ;-) Loved it - dirty talk turns me on and you handled it well. Also loved the cardigan-wearing cougar-in-heat. Yowsa!
More please!
I'm not a huge consumer of mature stories, but the setup here was new to me. I liked his hesitancy and insecurities at the start. I'd definitely read more of your work.