All Comments on 'Student Rents a Bedsit'

I really liked the meat of this story and the sex was hot. However, the way the characters talked to each other and the narrator's inner monologue were stilted to the point of being distracting. I don't know anyone who talks like this outside of a Victorian novel. Please consider having your characters express themselves more naturally.

I love this. Will there be another one following on from this?

Aimie2469 I enjoyed reading this story and hope you will write more about you two love birds and will you marry and have children and are you two still lovers please write more as this story is fantastic story thank you. xxxxx