All Comments on 'Succubus Rising Ch. 02'

Most of the chapter seems to suggest that she only spent one night with Asher. For instance "He sent me with Asher yesterday, sir"

But in two paragraph it is written that she spent weeks there "Since that first day with him so many weeks ago, ..."

Did you change your mind at some point and did not change everything ?

The "...so many weeks ago..." is right after a break. That break spanned weeks.

When she's with Larian in this chapter and he's asking where Chaz has been sending her, she was sent to Asher the day before this question was asked. So "yesterday" was the last time she had been sent out.

This entire chapter spans roughly a year over the various breaks. You're seeing glimpses of individual days between the breaks because if I had to write everything Asher did to her most of this story would be in either Erotic Horror or Non-con, and the original story had a lot more of the Asher sessions than this has.

I am seeing a lot of places I need to go back and fix in these earlier chapters, but it will be a couple weeks before I can get the edits in my pending box. Thank you for the feedback and the comment!

I stuck with you this long hoping that you’d turn this around but it has gone too far down the road of misogynist behavior to continue to hope for salvation. You are now officially ‘off the island’.