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by julesteve

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AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
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Could have been much better with punctuation (commas, etc.). Good visuals, but the lack of dialog made it very passive. Keep writing!

LitEroCatLitEroCatover 12 years ago
ugggh! Did your ',' key break? I've never seen a 4x run-on sentence before.

Coulda been decent, but toooooooo hard to read.

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