All Comments on 'Summer Lovin''

Definitely a good piece of hard work. Quite sexy... and by sexy ... I mean good to masturbate to...

Your words are going to make dozens, if not hundreds, of people cum over the next few days/weeks/months. Good job.

Oh, you be in the SOUTHERN hemisphere.

... ... Those of us in the NORTHERN half got a little confused; we got snow and cold and ice and wet up here. ...

... DAMN, I wish I was where you are.

Voted '5'

Sorry to all of you who were confused by a summer Valentine's - I'm in Australia where we're currently breaking heat records, it didn't even occur to me until after I had submitted it that those of you in the northern hemisphere were freezing your tails off.

Thanks for the comments and votes! Its great to hear from readers.

Emma

Actually I liked the title because I was thinking this would be a story of a couple at a Caribbean resort. Just the same it was a great story. Good luck in the contest.

Good job story was great but maybe you can drag out the intercourse a little more next time that part seemed a little quick but the rest was great! Now I know Australia would be great place for valentines day nice and warm lol. Thanks good luck with the contest.

You got it right every once in a while.

Yes, you put punctuation in the quotes, however, you only put periods, exclamation marks, and question marks at the END of the sentence.

Your way (most of the time):

"Hello." She said.

She said. "Hello."

the correct way (all of the time):

"Hello," she said.

She said, "Hello."

Do not put a period in the quote instead use a comma when the quote is at the start of the sentence. Also, do not capitalize 'she' when the word comes right after the quote. It is not the start of a new sentence.

Thanks very much for the feedback - I really do appreciate hearing from readers, your opinions on the story, what you liked and didn't like. And really I do appreciate constructive criticism, if there is something that you don't believe is right, or that could be improved, please let me know!

It has been a while since I've written anything involving dialogue (or anything at all for that matter) - which is why the punctuation is so off. I know this is no excuse, so sorry to readers who notice this, and find it detracts from the story.

Emma

You could have lengthened the very end a bit, it was very intense when he was fingering her asshole and playing with her pussy--just when it felt really exciting, it was over!

I also would have liked a little more, it ended too quick for me, I wasn enjoying the moment and then it was over, but good job, I enjoyed it imensely. Emma.