All Comments on 'Summer Strokes Pt. 01'

I really enjoyed your first effort and am looking forward to the next chapter. Good job!

Well written and very erotic, about the right pace and open for more fun.

Just check the detail. Were they in the bathroom or the kitchen when he ejaculated?

Facts are important.

Please keep writing stuff like this.

Great writing and pacing! Keep it up!

Good premise.

Good buildup.

But once sex started it was over almost before it started.

Needed extended playing/teasing/edging his cock. Needed dialog during it.

Needed much more involvement of her breasts.

Did he REALLY have to have the biggest cock she'd ever seen?

Three stars.