All Comments on 'Summer's Eve Pt. 01'

A slow but very effective build-up and very well-written. Super erotic. A rare find among erotic literature. A big Thank You! I hope part 02 is coming soon.

I get tired of the BBC garbage but at least you put a story and buildup behind this one. Much better than the average interracial crap stories. 3*

A fairly young married woman with two kids, (prior to having sex with a stranger) doesn't demand he use protection? But it gets better...

"Wash it out." he mumbled into her ear. "There is nothing to worry about. See, you're already done. Everything's alright."

You can't be serious?

Anonymous -

Thank you for your feedback, I always appreciate it. Sometimes people do pretty damn stupid things, especially when sexual lust is involved.. Also, considering this is a fictional novel, the events that take place can easily be a bit more... unrealistic than they would be in reality. But I get your point, and think it is a valid one

gordo12 -

Thank you for your feedback, I do appreciate it. Yeah, to a certain extent I can agree with you about the whole BBC theme being a bit overused. However, it is a pretty big part of the genre, and many people - me included - find it interesting and arousing. I do, however, always try to create a reasonably realistic build-up behind for stories of this kind.

I think you wrote and posted a great story and it is a good start for you as an erotic writer (this is your first submisssion, I guess). I don't think that it is unbelievable for fairly young beautiful white lady even with husband and two kids to cheat with a young strong black man and open her snowy white legs for huge black cock. Her sex life with her husband evidently has become boring for her and she was easily sedused by that black stranger at the first meeting. I hope that after 9 monthes her husband would be shocked at the delivery room, when he would see her new little addition to their family with kinky hair and caremel color skin. And her mixed race baby wouldn't be the only one in their family (due to Jack's help). As for me the story isn't too long, but has a good discriptions of nature and charecters. I liked it very much. Looking forward to read the next chapter (or chapters) of your wonderful story. Don't hang us too long.

P.S. Please correct the name of the black man (5th page) to Jack: 'John too was silent as he walked besides her...'

Your writing style has a way of capturing the emotions of the moment and helped make an all too common theme very enjoyable to read.

Incredible story. I really hope there is more to come.

I think some commentators need to remember that they are reading literotica, the home of erotic fiction, not the good housekeeping guide. Perhaps they would prefer a more believable tale where the wife politely excuses herself and returns to her humdrum wifely duties. I for one would much rather read about her encounter with a young well endowed black lover. Also, the wife taking her black boyfriends sperm into her virgina without birth control always adds a little spice to a story, and that's no bad thing

to long

Good store over all. Very good character development, good over all discription of the surroundings. The longer story read like a novel, great. Do more on the subject of BBC and very wht. females, one on one seems more real. Gang bands are cheesy stereotype and boring ! Thanks

Its never a sin to take the Black Alpha's seed. Every White woman was born with this natural yearning for impregnation. No White marriage can deny the craving for Black cock -- take your fulfillment and receive the sublime edification with blissful and worshipful delight. Hallelujah! Praise BBC!

A big massive, 5 stars. Why have you stopped writing, Gadolfsson?

@Gordo12 (1/8/16) "I get tired of the BBC garbage"

Then go elsewhere. If you go to the "BBC" tags, then that's what you get, you moron.

And how dare you vote down the work of this author

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@Anonymous (1/8/16) "Not very believable"

It was a work of fiction, you fool. Find another genre and stop leaving negative comments here

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@ Gadolffson (author). Please keep up the good work, you don't need to give the above dorks an explanation. Don't let them comprimise your excellent work. I've read the entire story and - unlike "Anonymous," I found it totally believable. Not everyone would behave like that, but some would, especially under the influence of lust

Mudshark madness for the typical ending for this kind of relationship.

Nice about to read the next chapters. Keep up the good work.