by Unsung Muse
This is brilliant.
A stunning bit of prose. I am in love with what you have done here.
You're a master story-teller. I love the slow seduction that your words manage to bring about.
That was a spot on description of those moments in time when nothing else matters. Your description of the breaking of this spell was actually my favorite part of the story.
It may be a backhanded complement, but you know just how good you are when the hacks saboutage your vote totals from sheer jealousy. Don't let the bastards get you down.
and whoever has you as part of their lives, even in the smallest capacity, is VERY lucky!
Very atmospheric, though very different from your other story. I really hope you keep writing for Lit. I would just hate it if you only wrote two stories.
Would have liked a bit of dialogue to set up the characters a bit, but a pretty good effort.
Just as sexy as your other story, and more accessable (to me, anyway.) I like this one a lot. I noticed 2 grmmatical errors - a sentence fragment and the word "shutter" when you mean "shudder," but aside from that it's all great.
Good work!