by Jay_Lloyd
You are so hot...it just comes out so freely in your writting..MORE MORE MORE PLEASE!! mmaauuhh
Very hot and vivid story. Very nice build-up, just enough. I could see Dawn clear as day (Been there!). Best of all you did in two segments what some authors use three and four to do. The detail sells a sex story and you hit it quite well. I'll be looking for more of your stuff.
Great job.