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by julesteve
- 28 Comments
commandochrisover 13 years agoWhatever anyone else says, these are great tales and I look forward to each one.
BFG85over 13 years agoIf you are into that lifestyle. If such things get you and your partner off then go ahead. Not everyone is into this lifestyle but we can enjoy a good looking woman. Which you are.
rivertown_ratover 13 years agoThe story is well written and the pictures are very nice. You are a hot sexy woman. Don't let the negative feedback bother you. They bothered me at first too, but now I laugh at them. The poor bastards can't help getting off on our stories, but then they feel so conflicted they just have to scold us to sooth their guilt. And they say we are fucked up!
Keep writing, you are a good story teller and I look forward to your next submission.
Pirate Tregareover 13 years agoI can't imagine what anyone might criticize. You have a delicious-looking body and your husband is incredibly lucky. And you write well!
WANNABENUDEover 13 years agoAnother wonderful story surpassed only by the beautiful pics included. You will always be one of my favorites!
commandochrisover 13 years agoHi I've always enjoyed your sharing of your adventures and I wondered if this was the end
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amsterdamabout 13 years agoAnother exciting adventure well told. Great pacing to the story and as commented by others, the wonderful photos added to the experience. The realism factor also aids my enjoyment of stories and this was a great example of just that.
DewiNaturalover 8 years agoJust love the way you guys have the freedom to explore your sensuality and sexuality thanks for sharing.
The pics of the lovely Jules get me hot.
enigma3over 4 years agolong may you continue to entertain with your writing. (ps) i gave up on feeling guilty about masturbating long ago lol
julesteveover 3 years agoAuthor'Good but lousy language and poor punctuation ruined it. Get an editor!'
Really?
In what way is the language lousy?
And if the punctuation was so bad, why read it through?
Amateur site, we are not paid to write stories, we just do it for fun and to share experiences, want perfection, try a paid site.
Anonymousalmost 3 years agoThe synergy between the text and the pics gave us a five star story ★★★★★ (5).
Anonymousalmost 3 years agoRe author's reply to anon comment
(half a year ago).
An erotic story or any story for that matter can be written in Pidgin English and still be very erotic.
The story must be authentic, the author must feel it with every atom of their body and with all the cells of their brain!
I wrote a vignette in Pidgin English (broken English) years ago. Someone was shit-talking the quality of English in an Indian wife sex story.
Ahead of the vignette I put forward my argument namely that when people write erotica their thoughts are pouring from their minds faster then their respective abilities to write it down. There is no time to think about grammer or punctuation or whatever.
When I wrote the vignette I had a very powerful inspiration. However I don't feel I could write anything now. The words I would write down would not be genuine.
Snowbird1968almost 2 years agoFantastic. Slow steady intense buildup to explosive climax. I felt I was there like Sam or Jake; just a friend or acquaintance you and Steve allowed in your inner circle. I could feel your moist folds and smell your arousal as I read. I wanted to taste just as Sam did. Thank you for sharing this private intimate sensual part of your relationship.
Anonymousabout 1 year agoYou are sooooo beautiful, can't we have another illustrated story? David (formerly WANNABENUDE)
Anonymous10 months agoThis model is absolutely fantastic. I can help create at least a hundred stories focusing on her if she would be willing to pose.
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