All Comments on 'Swimming with My Cousin Andrea Ch. 02'

I want to let all the readers know that I am posting a revised version which will fix all the grammer errors. I sent in my early copy for approval instead of my edited copy by accident. Sorry about this.

This is a great story line, please keep it up!!!!

this is an awesome story line i love it. keep the stories coming at least a couple more chapters. ppl will read so dont stop

I've only the one story, so I don't throw bricks at anyone's work. It has the makings of a great series. Whatever you do, just keep writing!

That you learn the location of a womans hymen and that women don't squirt cum. If something squirts it's urine.

You've improved a lot and damn if it didn't get even hotter. Keep up the good work and lay out Chapter 3 SOON!

This was just so sweet and hot :) Wish you'd written a few more chapters though - it really leaves us girls breathless this way !!!!

Get to Chapter 3!!!

Great blend of erotic sexual pleasure and tenderness.

By some accounts, women do squirt cum. It's not urine and provides lubrication. It's also ultra-sexy.

Pretty good story. Didn't read Chapter 1 yet so will need to go back.

And yes women do squirt, although it's more like a gush and it's not urine. No idea about the hymen although I'm not sure why it has to be mentioned in every first time story - some girls break theirs way before and not necessarily during sex/masturbation.

I really liked your story so far.Need another chapter.Don't leave me hanging.

I would have given you a 100 if you "closed the sale". Where is the finish?

this story is great....don't listen to all those other people. Take your time and develope things as you see fit....besides they should know by now the best things come in due time

Am I reading on here that some perv actually thinks that women don't excrete "come"? Crawl back into your cave, dude! Love sucking my woman's come and watching a woman come.

In chapter 1 Andrea was a D cup. In Chapter 2 she's a DD.

R-I-G-G-E-D is how a gambler fixes a game. R-I-G-I-D is stiff.

And the sex went too fast. It was zero to sixty. Take more time. Lots of foreplay with how it felt to her and how it felt to him, and perhaps some reticence that had to be overcome -- step by step by step.

Not a bad story. But not great either. The dialogue is cookie cutter at best, and not realistic at all. I give it an 6/10

Very hot. Good development.

However, you have used incorrect words. Through for threw, etc. An editor should take a look at it.

Your storie is very good but in order to be considered a good writer you should work on being able to correctly use the English language. Words such as Threw and Through , knew and new and a few other proper words to use. You should either have someone proof read and edit for you or even take an English class in college such as creative writing or composition English. Other wise it was great.

when I read a response, especially from the author, to a comment(s) no longer there.

The next most negative situation is when there is no way to respond to a fallacious, silly, and anatomically incorrect comment made by - - anonymous. Come on folks, at least have the courtesy to take the time to create a screen name so a comment such as

" . . women don't squirt cum. If something squirts it's urine."

can be given a response by those who have experienced the wonder of such a powerful orgasm. Not someone who got pissed on by a women lacking bladder control.

Then, of course, there is the ever present critic making disparaging remarks about the spelling errors of an author who can't spell when writing their own criticism.

"Your storie (sic) is very good but in order to be considered a good writer you should work on being able to correctly use the English language."

to which I give a resounding

duh.

rotflmfao

"Moaned liked a whore" Do you mean faking it? Why must guys put down women they are describing? Was the guy a whore when he ate her pussy? She was "sucking my cock like a whore," Let's see, that means, he has a condom on, and she's fake moaning to make him come faster. I'm tired of the double standard. You had a good incest story going, and suddenly she's a whore because she's doing exactly what your protagonist was doing. I quit reading there. Have a little respect or move to the control/abuse category. I'm anonymous here for personal reasons, name's Fred.

I never fucked a virgin.

Not sure it would be as thrilling as my imagination.

Fun read so far.

Still 4 stars