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I can't teach you to be a good writer in one open comment, but I want to be encouraging. So, keep writing, but find an editor / proofreader / mentor to review your work and advise you before you submit it. Volunteer editors are available through this site. It wasn't good, but with a guidance and a little work, (OK, maybe a lot of work) it could be made better. Good luck.

We would like to thank everyone with their positive constructive comments via the electronic mail...once again this is our first story and we love both the negative and positive comments... by the way this is a true story to its extent and only the names have changed...

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More please. Ignore the miserable miscreants.

Oh, and "love balloon?" I had a high school classmate who wrote at this level.