by MissNDecisve
I think you are a fabulous sex writer and I want to get to know you bertter as you are gorgeous as well. Mikejoshtarp71@yahoo.com
This comment applies to all three of your Literotica submissions. I like your stories. They show a smooth flow of events that makes for pleasant reading for me. Your Bio and pic adds an extra dimension to your stories. I don't think you are the protagonist in your stories [Are you?] but I see a sexy and active immagination well expressed. Now for the bad stuff. I gave you a 50% rating on your submissions as there were several glitches in your use of the language, ie, wrong words, missing words funky sentences and some questionable punctuation. These things tear up an otherwise very readable story for me. First, read your stories over several times looking for those language glitches. You might be suprised at what you find. Then, GET SOME HELP!!!! Literotica has guest editors who will gladly help you polish your stories. Last but not least, read KillerMuffin's entries in the How To story section. Read them and memorize them. They are valuable. All that said, keep it up and GOOD LUCK. Art
That story is a near perfect example of a super good fucking time. Highly recommended to anyone wishing a quick arrousal or a script to use to engage in some seriously pleasurable sex.
I loved the first person perspective of the story. Erotic, seductive, well paced and fucking sensual. I came twice while imagining it taking place :)