All Comments on 'Tablet Master Ch. 03'

For a story that had such a great first chapter, you completely lost it here.

The same words summon and return her to the tablet. Anyone can say the words to return her to the tablet. She has to stay in the tablet a day before being summoned again. These are the rules we've been given.

And yet you toss them out when Valsheen uses it. She's trying to kill the thief/rapist and is sent into the tablet and then suddenly summoned amongst the little group. Now if a day had actually passed you should have included something to that extent. As it is it feels to me like Valsheen teleported away and summons her as soon as he's in that meeting which is why she feels the pain from being outside her range so quickly and there's a single paragraph covering her ranting without a single hint at a significant amount of time passing. That really hurt the story in my opinion.

Indeed, a few days had passed actually and I didn't show it in the story. My bad.