All Comments on 'Taboo Initiation'

for writing

Story's going like 80mph, needs to be expanded out, add some background

No experience virgins and they butt fuck.

Choice between sweet wet pussy and fry asshole...

Come on. I want pussy.

you also changed the name of cousin Don to Allen,

and anal with no preparation?

it's not a bad story,

just needs reworked

I love your mind!

Everything was completely rushed. This could have been expanded into several longer chapters. Also you started with Don and then i guess changed his name to Allen. I would have liked a little more background I characters as well as more descriptions of each ones physique and other physical attributes before and after becoming unclothed. The story line is good and with a little editing and reworking has huge potential.

who the hell is Allen? where the f*ck did he cum from?

so much happening in the story. But why gay sex also?