All Comments on 'Taken By My Son'

I have mixed feelings about this...the story was wonderful till Page 2, then the whole rape thing sorta sickened me. Adam's general treatment of his mother and his philandering ways portray him in a very poor light...no mother deserves to be treated like this by her son. Sadly, I think Vicky deserves much better.

I'll hold off on rating this. Thanks for writing.

Mothers do not normally jump in bed with their sons breaking the biggest taboo in the world!

There should have been a lot more reluctance from the mom in the beginning.

When you write the dialogue first and then the narrative that describes who is talking, you get it right. This is an example.

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"Stay a while and relax, Vicks," he said.

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The thing is, the order doesn't matter. For sentences such as this, the dialogue and the narrative are part of the same sentence and paragraph.

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For example, you posted the following.

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Adam leant forward and delicately touched my inner lips and the entrance to me with the tip of his tongue. It was like an electric shock, I moaned slightly and whispered,

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"Oh yes baby, it's yours, it belongs to you now. Kiss me there sweetheart."

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It should have been formatted like this.

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Adam leant forward and delicately touched my inner lips and the entrance to me with the tip of his tongue. It was like an electric shock.

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I moaned slightly and whispered, "Oh yes baby, it's yours, it belongs to you now. Kiss me there sweetheart."

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This is just a FYI to help you grow as a writer.

A read.

I love that Adam is in total charge of his mother Victoria who's also his wife. This isn't "male chauvinism," it's simply nature. After all, he's the one with the cock. The couple has an idyllic sexual relationship, capped by Adam fucking babies up where he was once a baby. That thrills Victoria down to her toes, and makes her bursting proud of her son, his manly virility, and his potent young balls. I think the key to the great hotness of their saga is that "Adam still whispers 'Mom' at intimate moments from time to time." For a boy, nothing can ever compare with knowing that the cunt he's pumping is his own mommy's cunt. That that warm wet wonderful hole between her legs is the same hole he came out of. His body is all aglow and his young cock feels better to him than ever before, surrounded and embraced by layers of loving mommy-twat. Then the boy unloads his young balls and shoots his mom full of his creamy semen, the most precious gift a son can ever give his beloved mother. Adam and Victoria in this five-star story understand full well the deep truth of the old saying, "a boy's penis and his mother's vagina--made for each other."

Started to enjoy the story and then he turned into a complete prick and rape is never justifiable either in real life or fiction. no score as don't where my though lies on the submission.

I was really liking this story until it took its dark turn, Seeing the son become abusive, even if he eventually came to his senses and stopped, took away a lot of my enjoyment.

I thought I was going to like it well enough until you turned it the way you did you messed it up a few times and never was able to fix it like when they started to allow other men to see her naked while he watched that may seem like fun and games until she loses control and decides to go ahead fuck another guy it always happens playing that kind of game it starts out her thinking about the other man and she decides to see what it will be like to be with him that is just one of the ways you fucked up don't get me wrong you are a pretty good writer but stories like this one you would be better served to write how it would in real life even if it is fake just trying to give you some pointers on how to make your stories better I have been writing for years and I am thinking about trying my hand in erotic stories such as you find on this site good luck with your next story

A horny young man, and a horny mature woman, let the good times roll. Again, and over again!

Did the mother and son fuck for lust only to mate like animals and produce progeny only You have not mentioned whether they married and then the woman gave birth to her grandsons and the husband produced his sons from his mother's (now his wife)womb?

Exhibitionism is a dangerous game that shows an extreme lack of true love and respect...it will lead to cheating. Shaved pussy??? I prefer a woman not a 9 year old, just my preference...I don't like the hint at Dom/Sub. You don't have to be a Sub to please your mate...

wanted shaved pussy. I prefer a woman not a little kid. most guys are wimps toady...

This rewrite was stupid as hell you rewrite a story at least make it better than the first

You referred to the hotel owner/busboy as Adam’s father. What?

You nearly ruined it for me with your last paragraph. Why at her age would she want another child, for me they already had it all. I thought it was unnecessary ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Up until halfway through page 2 the story flowed very nicely. Then you flipped onto a dark side. I feel you are guilt ridden for taking your sons' childhood away from him. You're truly an example of a controlling person. I seen it with my ex wife and you are no different. Shame on you for being self centered and egotistical. You need to evaluate your life and let him carry on with his own.

The dom/sub crap is a huge turn off, lost 2 stars...

You done a horrible job on this the flow of the writing read as it was a forced write the whole way through then having think about having sex with another man while having sex with her son whom she says she loves then turning into a submissive basically and then having not 1 but 2 kids and hinted at more and so many other things it was horrible story a waste of a few minutes that ill never get back forcing myself to finish it

I gave it an average did not care for the dom part it should just have been true love!!!

Was good until the dom part there should have be3en real love between a mother and son!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Love the the story

I loved this part: Adam only ever called me mom on two occasions, and never ever altered. At the moment of his wonderful penis entering me, and when the first spurt of his ejaculation shot into either my mouth or vagina, he always whispered: "Mom." -HenryJMichaelson

I thought you did a great job. I love the submissive mom ,and how he quietly dominates her.,bosses her around. As she deserves. She needs to spend more time on her knees pleasing her son or is it master.