All Comments on 'Talla's Fallen Temple Ch. 23'

My compliments to your editor. Oh wait that's you :). Except for some continuity questions I couldn't see many errors. In chapter 22 Within told the goddess she would have the baby that night or the next day, but in this chapter Zhair'lo has been training for 2-3 weeks. Getting the chapter out quicker is worth that. You are moving this story forward slowly but surely. I hope we see Maska and Shanata again soon. And when are the women of the Temple going to figure out that Talla is a Goddess already? Keep up the writing and the editing. Chris

Thanks!

But Talla's a Goddess?

Anyway, I meant for Zhair'lo to have already been out there a couple of weeks before the last chapter even ended. No one actually checks continuity but me, though.

Talla's goddess born, but did nursing from the queen of abundance make her more powerful too? Zhair'lo is obviously goddess born, but did he increase Talla's power or did she increase him? Or are they increasing each other? A excellent chapter!!! Hopefully I will not have to wait too long for chapter 24. Chris

Mark of an awesome story. Not sure how you plan to wrap it all together but I'm looking forward to it.

... I do know where I'm going with this, but I wouldn't expect all of the loose ends to be wrapped up.

Its a good fiction keep it up

Is the hard part. I am enjoying this adventure very much. Please publish the next chapter as soon as possible.

Not much longer, I promise!

Just wondering in this world what happens to people who don't feel the "normal"sexual attraction?like gays lesbians and asexual people?

I'm rereading chapter 6 of Talla's Temple while waiting for the next chapter of Talla's Fallen Temple and I have to ask what is "Severe Service"?

... Anonymous (hmmmm) ... I was just getting to that ... one orientation at a time.

Sam. I could have gone another way with that, but I'm suspicious, given the way the Temple is, if it would ever use sex to punish a woman. Probably not their thing.

As always!

The passively shared mesh makes me wonder if both Zhair and Talla are descended from queens...

JRT