by CheeseCake4u
That was pretty hot. Wouldn't mind seeing more of this, I hope you consider posting another chapter.
Like: "Not many woman...." which should obviously be "not many women".
I love it, please post more, 2nd page the first "thought" should be taught. She needed to be taught this lesson.
If his powers don't work during the daytime, how did he pulse to her that she would only enjoy it when he called her princess? Besides this, I really liked it. Keep up the good work.
Yea there were some errors but like u said at beginning English is not ur first language... But i loved it and hope you can finish it and give an entire story to it. This scene was great and would love to see more.
I really liked the concept as well as the story. The only reason I didn't give it 5 stars is because I am, admittedly, a Grammar Nazi and there were too many typos for my OCD inflicted brain to ignore. But, like you said, English is not your first language. Anyway, very good story! Keep up the good work!
It was actually pretty good. I also like to take down spoiled rich girls. I love to have them crawl around on a leash, making them eat my pussy as well as those from my friends. Maybe that's an idea for part 2.
This was really good. You definitely need to write more of this. I haven't read a mind control story this good in a while, so please consider adding to this.
This is one of the best MC stories I have read, thanks great job!!!!
I don't know if you are planning to continue this story line, but you should. This was a very good opening and it deserves another chapter.
Well done. I think you should know your stories are well written and expertly paced. Exactly what I wanted to read without unnecessary fluff or lines. Plot was intriguing and rich, leaving many future possibilities open. Good job.
What a great storyline, it’s a shame you didn’t continue on with it. It’s nowhere near finished there’s soooo much more you can add to this story. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
Wow. This story was really hot. Most men's wet dream. To have that power. Agree with the other commenters that there is so much more you could do with additional chapters