by jernigan
What makes this such a steamy little story is its realism, the UCLA setting namely. Tara seems like your typical Asian student (quiet, doesn't express much) and the dialog between the two girlfriends is the way young students normally talk. The style is unique and instead of focusing on all the gory details emphasizes key sensual images. The sex scene, though, sorta reeks of porno movie material (I think I saw it in a porno) but it's still hot stuff. Loved it. Can't wait to read more from you.
Threesomes are not my cup of tea, really, but if fitted properly into certain stories, it can be terrific. Like in this story. It's very short compared to your "Picabo" story but it packs a powerful punch. You have a talent for diction, style and you write sex scenes with flowing, earthy sensuality and realism, and at the same time so suited to erotic fantasies and daydreams. I really loved it. I may not be into black men, and least of all two of them, but this story was written so that it oozes sexual abandon. Well done.
She assumes the position? Doesn't get any duller than this.