All Comments on 'Tauna's Kids Explore Each Other'

you really need a good editor i mean come on "HE ENJOYED A HOT SHOWER,THE BODY SPLASHING OFF HIS MUSCULAR BODY" bodies can't splash off bodies don't you reread your stories before posting SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND SOME RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND PROOF READ YOUR STORIES AND ALWAYS USE A GOOD EDITOR THIS NEEDS A REWRITE i stopped after the second paragraph it wasn't worth the trouble of figuring out what you are trying to say

I thought it was a pretty good story. Even went back to reread the mistake mentioned, prior. Found the passage and had to reread it twice to find the mistake. What these "armchair" amateur critics seem to forget most the time is that these stories are fiction written by amateurs. Amateur authors are supposed to make foolish or stupid mistakes. So buck up buck-o and ignore most of your "armchair" amateur critics.

Now, on the other-hand, you kinda cut the story short. momma needs to "accidentally" find bro and sis going at it and joins in for happy family threesome.

What do you think? Chapter 2 comin' up?

"Amateur authors are supposed to make foolish or stupid mistakes."

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No. There is a difference between amateur and amateurish. The notion that grammar and punctuation -- learning the basics BEFORE you try writing a story -- are not necessary is lazy and inane. Would you draw architectural plans before learning drafting? Why is writing the one discipline where learning the basics is not required? It's as if the only prerequisite is that you can type.

You know what he meant, just shut the fuck up.

good story dude, bad grammar

shame there wasnt more