by BadgerHunter
Good but you're rushing. Slow down a bit and write a full chapter instead of throwing something out to submit just for the sake of doing so.
I apologise, I really do, I believe moving forward my stories need to be definitely longer with less "skipping" between areas. I will try avoid the rushed attitude that in hindsight is quite evident, I can only say sorry.
Taylor Swift has never said "Merry Bloody Christmas" in her life. Right there you lost readers. This is garbage.