All Comments on 'Taylor's Awakening'

Woah, that was hard work on the reader! Can you think of any more different words to bombard us with? :) This was written like a comedy ("clothed blood-engorged massive woody-womb-pecker" is hilarious) but the subject matter and dialog were not really comical at all, so it felt a little schizophrenic in intent. I think toning down on the more ludicrous metaphors and similes would improve your readability. It's OK to use the same noun twice in one story, honest!

This is hot and made me cum by the end of page one.

However, you need to work on your writing. The tense keeps shifting from present to past. Chose one (past is better) and stick to it.

Sorry, author ... I tried.

Cool story, pretty hot. But the whole. . . . . Filled with cum, was she. . . . Thing didn't seem to fit right.

Woody-womb-pecker? Seriously? That killed it for me more than the bad form and syntax did, honestly.

Good story, please write more!

Have never seen a swimmers body.

Great story!!!!! More like a semi-consensual with a little seduction. Please do a 2nd chapter. He is sooo lucky to enjoy and knock-up Taylor the Olympic athlete. Kewl.

the story was rife with spelling errors.

Spell check your work before posting please.

The Superbowl is in February, so she couldn't be swimming. Also, there were several adjectives that were unnecessary.

This has left me speechless and not in a good way. In one way, it was horrible...the grammar was so bad that some sentences made absolutely no sense. Then there were the ridiculous phrases he says such as:

woody-womb-pecker

E.B.E. {Extraterrestrial Biological Entity}

Michael's Spear of Destiny

Taylor's Womb of Eden

his especially virile baby batter

Really??? Those sound like phrases a teenager would use that thinks he is a God to all the females on the planet. I was generous in giving it 3 stars. I think this will go on my list of "Writers never to read again" list.

I think the term “woody-womb-pecker” Kind of ruined this for me.

We need. Another story now. Write more please