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Doctor Peters was rambling, trying to convince her not to do the procedure, telling her that her figure was already beautiful and that, in any case, large breasts were over-rated. When that line of reasoning failed to sway her, he started talking about the discomfort involved: saying the procedure was essentially a long series of needle-sticks without any anesthesia. Elise remained undeterred. Then he started talking about the unknowns. They had tested the process on roughly a hundred volunteers during the past five years, mostly in Asia, but they had never done the procedure in the U.S. before, and never on such short notice.
"I trust you," Elise said, walking beside him. "I know you've been working on this for a really long time. I'm sure your investors wouldn't have so much faith in you if the method was unsafe."
"Look," Arthur said finally, "I appreciate your confidence in me, and... I'll admit that, if everything goes well, it really will be a compelling demonstration. It will help sell the PVA patents, for sure. Which would be great, but... I don't feel right about submitting you to this when so much of the benefit will inure to me and Doctor Yamamoto, rather than to you."
"So what? It's still a win-win."
"No. You need to let me pay you somehow. Especially if it helps us make the sale."
"Pay me? Well... I hadn't really thought of that. I'm just excited to be getting it done for free. I mean, the only reason I'm even considering this is because they'll be natural, made of my own tissue rather than some stupid plastic implant. Fake boobs are gross. I'd never want a foreign object in my body. But these will be real. Just like, a little bit more. Which is exactly what I've always wanted."
"That's all fine. But you need to be compensated."
"Well, okay, so pay me. Obviously I could use the money. Here I am couch surfing, after all, right? But... you know... there is actually one thing I'd like even more."
"What?"
"A job," Elise said, touching Arthur on the forearm. "Why don't you hire me?"
"Seriously?" Arthur stopped and turned to face her.
"Yeah. Like, full-time. I could be your assistant, or the office manager or something. Whatever you want. But I want to have real responsibilities... and a salary and benefits and all that."
"Huh. That's actually not a bad idea."
"I know." Elise smiled up at him. "It'll be awesome. I could get my own place and really feel like I have a career."
Doctor Peters did not say anything, but the lines around his eyes faded. He looked almost happy.
"So...? It's a deal?" Elise said.
"Office Manager. I like the sound of that. But it'll have to wait. I can't afford to hire you until the ink is dry on the sale. And in any case you need to be a volunteer for at least the rest of this week."
Elise threw her arms around his neck, standing on tiptoe and stretching her body to hug him tightly. Arthur clutched her torso in return, his wide hands spanning her back. They stood hugging for most of a minute, pressed together at the far end of a seldom-used corridor.
"Oh, and one more thing." Elise said, dropping back onto her heels and sliding her hands down to Arthur's chest.
"What's that?"
"The guys; especially Alex and Hiro. You have GOT to talk to them about their manners. They're getting way too touchy with me. It's gross."
"What?!"
"Yeah. I didn't want to say anything before, but today in the limo was kinda... too much."
"What on Earth do you mean?" Arthur asked, instinctively removing his hands from around Elise's ribcage.
"No, no, I didn't mean to make it sound so dramatic. And it has nothing to do with you, Doctor Peters," she backpedalled; snugging her hands around his waist and leaning back with her hips purposefully pressed against him to emphasize that second sentence. She hung there, like as squirrel on the trunk of an Oak tree. "It's just, I think partly because of my uniform, you know, the younger guys sometimes can get a little frisky."
"But who has touched you? I need to know."
"Don't take it that way. I'm not trying to get anyone in trouble. It's just that... I know a word or two from you would go a long way. That's all."
"I'm so sorry, Elise. I'll handle it right away. And you just let me know if you ever feel uncomfortable again, okay?"
"Thanks Doctor P." she grinned up at him.
Arthur's expression softened again: "Oh yeah? And since when do you get to call me that?"
"Since now," Elise purred. Then she let go of him and sauntered away a couple paces. She casually linked her fingers behind her butt and spun around to face him, flicking her long hair to one side and flaunting her skimpy outfit. Her wide hazel eyes regarded him confidently, inviting his gaze in return.
"Office Manager," she said proudly.
"Yep."
"I wanna take a picture... to remember this."
"Oh, come on..."
"No, really! Just stay right there. I'll use my phone, n'kay?"
Elise unlocked her smartphone and noticed she had a missed call from her mom. She tapped 'Ignore' and triggered the phone's timed-photo function instead. She then propped it vertically atop a steel file cabinet near the opposite wall of the hallway.
She scampered back to Arthur and pulled his hands up onto her shoulders as she turned to face the camera. The countdown ticked away. She leaned back against him and relaxed her arms at her sides. She crossed her feet. At the very last second she moved her left hand behind her butt and gently touched Arthur's pants.
There was a flash.
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- COMMENTS
inkyscandalabout 10 years agoAuthorI love the ardor of these comments! I am indebted to you all for granting me a view into how my stories affect their audience. Indeed, how else am I to grow and improve as a writer? I am especially indebted to 'Auden James' for kicking my butt into gear after the terrible first version of Ch.7. It was he who re-lit my fuse and helped me get started on the 2nd half of this tale. But I am also very aware that each reader sees, and wants, something different... and that the story I wish to tell will not please everyone.
To wit, let me explain the view from my keyboard:
1. Elise is young and naive but also "very smart" (Ch.1). She is a natural pleaser and is often an unwitting tease. She is willing to adapt to her environment (however crazy) in order to stay in everyone's good graces. She also learns! She is on a journey of growth here, as young people generally are, not stuck in some static rut. Is she more assertive now than in Ch.1 & 2? Yes. Is that understandable? Yes. Has she learned who to trust and who not to trust? Yes. Is she more confident in her interactions with the person she most trusts (Dr. P.). Yes, of course. Is she more assertive when sexually aroused & proximate to Dr. P? Yes. Is she more reactive/shy when aroused in the presence of the other guys, for whom she has far less trust/respect? Yes. Is she still willing to bend over backwards to please them? Yes, but reluctantly and maybe not for much longer. Again, this is normal. What does Elise want? Several things; 1. to stay away from home (Chs.1-5), 2. to parlay her internship into a permanent job (Ch.1), 3. to win Dr. P's affection (both because she is attracted to him and because he is her best available ally in her present environment), 4. to otherwise stay out of trouble (esp. with Dr.Y). She works toward achieving these objectives, often via independent action. Again, she is smart and adaptive, not a complete slave to her recently-awakened subservient impulses (though they exist). To wit: the vignette in the shoe store shows adaptive learning and a sentient person's ability to improvise in order to accomplish an objective (satisfying Dr. Y's 20-minute demand). The scene shows Elise has learned to succeed in her new world... (i.e. it is character development).
2. Arthur is on a journey as well, despite his age. He bears scars he does not entirely understand. Slowly he is changing course, traveling in a slightly new direction now, breaking out of a long-standing rut. Where will this new path take him? And what does his old love Sylvia have to do with all of this? Those are the big questions for him.
3. Content: Not every chapter will contain exhibitionism, or even teasing, as we move forward. Ch. 10 will probably move back to Erotic Couplings. There will come a time, perhaps as soon as chapter 11, when this plot's trajectory lands on its intended target and explodes. That final scene is already written, and will not necessarily seem erotic to all/any. But questions will be answered, and that, certainly, is important to me in THIS story (unlike my others... and unlike much of the stroke-happy stuff already ubiquitous here). It only remains for me to find the time to connect the narrative released thus far to that final scene. For that task, I beg your patience.
Anyway... I am no expert storyteller, that's for sure. This is a lark and I am learning as I go. I truly appreciate everyone's deep reading of my work and comments thus far. I respect each.
And of course I would love to hear any thoughts my above ramblings bring to mind, to keep me on course. ;-)
With gratitude,
Inkyscandal
Anonymousabout 10 years agoHi Inkyscandal, you are my most favorite author on Lit. I really appreciate that you invest a lot of time and effort into your work and that I am confident will go a long way in winning you a huge following. Not a lot of writers do that anymore.
I thought that chapter 8 was bit light on the public exposure theme which some of the readers did point out. 9 did have a lot exposure (in the Limo) but may be in the future you could create some more public scenarios. Also, I like how you almost teased the readers when the men in the limo were about to touch her down there but decided it was going too far and they should stop! Way to tease us man! It is great you have not let every man in the lab use her as they please, everyone is still pretending to be decent and playful. Can you give us a teaser for what coming up next?
eroticaclassicabout 10 years agoI have read all the parts several times over and I love them and will continue to do so like your other fans. I don't think Elise was overly assertive in this chapter, the limo episode is proof. One could think of her as a young girl who sometimes comes across as assertive to the readers, but still is naive, gullible and vulnerable deep inside. I would not want Elise to be a portrayed as a bimbo. Elise will go out of her way to be appreciated by the people at the lab. how is that in anyway overly assertive? And I also don't think the name of the series "tease to please" in any way specifies who's to be the tease and who's to be pleased! Elise does not have to be the tease always, its perfectly okay for the plot if she is on the receiving end of the teasing and/or the pleasing. You have maintained a good balance in his regard. This in no way, according to me, weakens the plot or deviates from the central theme.
These are genuinely good stories and stand out on literotica or any website for that matter. I think you pay enough attention to reader comments and have given an excellent direction to the story. It is perfect with its little "imperfections"! Let your imagination flow and keep writing!
Auden Jamesabout 10 years agoAs with chapter 5 of “Tease to Please” (especially the final scene) I cannot help but wonder again, reading the beginning of chapter 9, if the author has once more (slightly) lost her grip on the characters (especially the heroine, Elise) or even the general underlying motivation and direction of the narrative at hand. I mean, don’t you also think that Elise comes across (once more) as “too assertive,” so that her not even seemingly innocuous but wholeheartedly peremptory stance towards Arthur and his colleagues, to use the author’s own evaluative words, “foreclosed the tension” that is most thrilling about “Tease to Please” in the first place?
Granted, with the aid of a little mnemonic reprimand on Arthur’s part the situation didn’t escalate completely, but what then was the point of Elise’s “assertive” morning regime, inordinate flirting (“So use me a lot, okay?”), penis peeping and so on? I for one don’t know what to make of this re-assertive, re-aggressive Elise after just a night of sleep from the aborted consequence administrations the evening before. Speaking of consequences: what’s up with Dr. Yamamoto not touching with one word or gesture the almost logically necessary “repercussions” of Arthur’s (and by extension Elise’s) insanity charge? A kind of narrative blank filled with some rather bland and precipitant action in and out of a limousine, low on teasing and pleasing (as well as character development, especially on part of Elise who is nothing but limber limbs in a limousine, and with Alex’s ardent remarks, though cheerful, forming no exception).
And then comes the big moment of the presentation meeting, and again Elise takes a wholeheartedly peremptory stance, this time on her role in and right of a “demonstration” of PVA tissue to the dubiously important “investors and potential buyers.” This setup would have lent itself perfectly well for a pleasingly entertaining verbal exchange or, more neatly expressed in German, “Schlagabtausch” involving all parties presently involved in the narrative. Instead I read some rather less inspired and substantiated verbal to and fro between Elise and Arthur and some show-less telling of the outcome which comes out rather unsurprising and underwhelming (a “boilerplate” for human experimentation or what? And in addition: What’s the persuasiveness of, if everything goes well, a single solitary successful “PVA tissue implantation” if the prospective investors must be actually interested in high success-rates and low associated costs of doing hundreds and thousands of such implantations? Wouldn’t the edited and visualized results of the tests “on roughly a hundred volunteers” that Arthur mentions almost maliciously en passant near the end of the present chapter thus be incomparably more persuasive to the prospective investors’ interests?).
Anyway, in the end the present chapter seems to be, at least to my mind, on the whole one big aversion – an aversion of what lies at heart of “Tease to Please” and makes it stand out from the Lit crowd (at its best moments). This aversion becomes literally evident at the end of the present chapter where the author abruptly ends the narrative mid-action, mid-day, a chapter close never before encountered in the series and a token of the author’s recoil from the narrative’s heart and beat. Somehow the beat simply seems askew in chapter 9, for our heroine acts rather out of character, gets de facto nude but without noteworthy teasing (and even less pleasing), great narrative opportunities present themselves but get not taken by the author who instead overplays underwhelming ‘action’ (shoe shopping anyone?) and thereafter withholds a genuine story high point (the 3D render, published beforehand, doesn’t count), in a word: aversion.
Thus the present chapter 9 is, at least to my mind, clearly the weakest since the first draft of (by now excellently revised) chapter 7. I’m not sure if it were advisable to revise the present chapter or more expedient to simply check it off as a rather uneventful plot stretch to set the stage for an imminent beat explosion, to pick up my metaphorical talk about the story at hand from the paragraph above, i.e. concentrating and bringing-to-the-fore what got somewhat lost in the present chapter: thrilling and tense teasing (instead of superficial, uninvolved denuding), world-rich characterization (instead of world-less stasis and even contra-characterization), tight plotting (instead of uninspired, uneven telling-down), and a narrative high point that really makes it worthwhile for the reader to read the next chapter (frankly, I didn’t really feel that to be the case with the present chapter).
Evidently, I make no pretence of my apprehensions about the narrative’s current direction, on the formal plot level as well as the content or ‘literary’ level, but I firmly believe that the author of the impressive “A Doctor’s Dream” series is going to make appropriate corrections where corrections are (over-)due. I’m keen to read on!
Thanks for reading and (maybe) considering my, alas, rather critical remarks,
Auden James
