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All Comments on 'Teasing Trio'

by kreigen12

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AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
structure

Bad sentence and paragraph structure, it chops up the story. I couldn't even finish the story because of the poor flow.

HeaditorHeaditorover 8 years ago
Pity

This story has promise but is impossible to read due to grammar and construction. Writing in a second language is hard; please find a good editor to help so we can enjoy your story.

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