by trixie_leigh
Jesus, that was horrible. As an experiment in writing style you earn a bit ZERO. ee cummings you are not. Bad story + unreadable = No need to try again.
Come on out sweetie. I guarantee you the boys will love some new hole to fill.
the subject is not bad at all,
but
the
single
word
carriage
returns
are
entirely
distracting.
Please STOP! Let the story set the pace, not the type.