All Comments on 'Thanks to Shelley Ch. 01'

You seem to have a great talent for the details. I enjoyed the mixture of English and Italian. Above all else...keep writing

... be aware of the limitations of whatever translation service you've been using.

Though not a native italian speaker, I do not think that Alex, da donna inammorata, avrebbe usato quelle parole che sembrano cosi naturali in inglese.

Many writers on this site have fallen on this trap ... No big deal, but mixing in a foreign language isn't easy.

really good start please continue so many places these two could go

Beautifully done.

That last line made it great.

PS. Concord aeroplane is "Concorde"

HP

Lovely writing :)

' Ok seriously this story is HOT ! i loved it you have an incrediable way to describing details without going too far and over explaining ! Please continue this story i throughly enjoied it. It's the best story i have had the pleasure of reading on this site :)

regards Eliza .x

I enjoyed this so much, I had to let you know before I move on to chapter 2. Thanks for submitting this and I look forward to reading more of what you have to offer.

I am genuinely chuffed to bits with the feedback that I have received so far, thank you for taking the time to send it - it really is appreciated :)

I'll admit I was not as pleased with my efforts on Ch.02 - felt I lacked the same detail and because it was so fast moving became a little stilted.

As for the mixed comments on the Italian/English element - all very fair comments and I too thought it was a little distracting - I wish I had some very clever and creative reason for doing it - I don't - I simply love women that speak Italian!

On that note - if there are any Italian women who would like to take the time to private tutor me - that would really not be a problem :)

Thanks again guys and gals - I haven't started part 3 but will be with you soon - any ideas more than welcome!

Geeky_Lez_UK xxxxx

Many thanks for this story. Please, make it a long one with as many chapters as you can.

Thanks in advance.

I loved what you wrote here. The start made me smile. Not many stories have the realistic side done as well as you did. And the dildo-strapon thing was hot as hell!

Sad epilogue :( I don't want people to be hurting at the end of a story.

The story is cute and sweet, but the obvious Google Translate copy pasta did make me cringe. You should take advantage of Literotica's forums the next time you use foreign languages, since there's people from everywhere who can help you with context.

Thanks for a great story. Clearly, you are a gifted and talented writer. Keep up the great work.- ChristieP

It started slow , but ended great . Going to read part 2 now.

It got me wet ;) I'm sharing it with my gf (yes, I'm a girl)

The end was like, "wait... What?"