All Comments on 'The Abyss Ch. 05-06: Sasha's Submission'

Yeah, its ok, but nowhere near as good as your other stories.

You need a really good editor to combine these chapters, get rid of the fluff and excess and cut it down to about 2 good chapters. This has gotten ugly.

I'm not getting paid to write, at least not in money. I needed this chapter to cement the relationship between Justine and Sasha. I'm really excited about the next few chapters, which will hopefully be published in a week.

And honestly I do not know why these morons decided to attack like that, but oh well. That is their choice. My criticism is based out of confusion??? You lost me in the jump in chapters. It seemed like I missed a chapter in the middle. Where did Mistress Laurine go thru all this?? Were they still at Mistress Laurine's house? Were they back in the states?? As an old Leatherman, I understand the concept of switches (even tho I personally do not recognize switches), so how did we arrive at Mistress Justine?? Lots of as yet, unanswered questions

I needed a bridge chapter to establish that Sasha is submissive to both Laurine and Justine.

They are in Mistress Laurine's house, sometime after Justine has taken Sasha's punishment from Mistress Laurine. Mistress Laurine knows of Justine's plan to make Sasha submit to Justine but is not physically present for this scene.

Hopefully this clarification will help set up the following chapters on Mistress Anastasia and Nicole.

Happy reading!

Mistress SWP

Still loving every word.

SWP ..... Have been through some comments and a chapter might expose some facts, the reader doesn't understand yet, but in the following chapters it might makes sense ...... So patience it is

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