by openmindedman
What an engaging story, great characters, well written and very, very enjoyable. I would look forward to additional stories as they become available.
Thanks
I've not sucked cock as an adult but I do fantasize about it and have even written a couple of GM stories. I love these stories when a great cock sucking opportunity presents itself to an otherwise straight male, and yours was very good. the perfect amount of background info and build-up to the eventual hott action. and then leaving your readers begging for more.
well done!
Good story. Well thought out and flows nicely. Keep them <ahem> coming.
Well done and you might have finished this instead of making us wait. But that's ok and I will look forward to Ch. 2. I have one complaint and that's your use of "seductively." You used the word twice, that I counted. Adverbs should not take the place of description unless that would take too much time and not add anything. Like bothering to describe how opening a door in a short period of time, and telling us all about the movements involved in doing that, is better than saying, "he opened the door quickly." But when she does something "seductively," you are taking a short cut that should be described. It shifts the burden of imagining from you, the author, to us, your readers. That is your job. I have a thing about adverbs and try to avoid them whenever possible. But good work otherwise, and, as I said earlier, I look forward to Ch.2
Well written, brings back great memories of hard cock and wet pussy.
Looking forward to more.
It was a well written and very erotic read. The setup and the whole scene was fun. Keep up the good work i look forward to your writing.
Everything's perfect--the woman is the catalyst to a guy fulfilling his curious urges. That's the way it should be. Well written and feasible.
I loved the story and how it developed. Most men could see how they could "accidentally" become involved with this type of 3 way action.
Great outline, well written, just a good solid read........Well done......
Nice story....very interesting and I would like to experience this myself...have alwyas thought of myself as hetrosexual only...like to try the oral and cock sucking.
Like to feel it go from soft to hard..
If wishes were fishes, we'd all be better swimmers - or something like that. In peer groups all of us tend to reach farther, and some times even learn a little more about ourselves. It's a shame we can't control circumstances to have happy endings, or beginnings like this occur. Good read. I'm betting your imagination, or real life experiences have more stories to share. So where are they? Please more.
Tony
The first one is for the start of a wonderful time. I like this. Four stars
Usually when someone prefaces a story with, I like to start with a back story it means the story is 3 or 4 pages before anything happens. But yours was just the right amount of intro and build up. Nice work. Watch out for the adjectives, another story for another day... When you write that think about it and then take it out - too cute. And when it turns sexual, slow down. I mean really slow down. Be a bit more descriptive with the details. All in all, I liked the hell out of it and it's now a favorite. Cheers~