All Comments on 'The Accidental Voyeurist'

A little confusing with which woman is doing what, but still a good read.

Great job. Always good to read a really well written story.

Agreed. I had to read backwards during that section to understand who was talking, but never the less, it was a great story. Keep writing!

Except for the stupid chitt about Sarah having her lover and common law helpmate just haul ass without any explanation after 10 years. Dayom, it wasnt as if he would have feared being shot as he moved his stuff out. Oh yeah, and he loved her. I bet it was undercooked scrambled eggs. Well, coulda been he lissangu too.

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Thank you for a sweet story, well written. And yes, the use of pronouns was confusing as were some of the longer sentences. Nevertheless, I look forward to reading more of your work.

The confusion about the pronouns adds to the fantasy quality. Thank you for a very well written story.

I agree - it does add to the fantasy quality. Sarah puts herself in the other woman's shoes and vice versa, and the reader gets to feel the same thing they do, whether it's confusion or empathy or want.

Sensuous loving between our couple. The problem is Sarah, she didn't cum on Piers tongue or while she was riding him. She was interrupted both times. Was this her reason for leaving so soon ? Hope they don't just run, Sarah already feels abandoned. I do like the seduction and invitation of their voyeur.

Fabulous - and so real!

So 5* from me.

Professional writing.

Just describing the mechanics of sex is not erotic but you do it really well.

A Fabulous story that was well written and very believeable. Eroticism as it should be.

Nice plot,nice pace. I could actually see this happening. Sexy and fun, 5 stars,