All Comments on 'The Addicted Natural Ch. 02'

I enjoyed it a lot...

is as Good as the First. cant wait to see where things go from here and Does The Great Menlo pay for his indescretions

I would except my Girl just like our Hero in this Story.

but I would make sure he never came back for Seconds.

I don't know what to make of this story. It's really well written and is captivating from that point of view, the characters are likeable and believable and its simply easy to read.

However, I'm not sure about the protagonist not being the one with 'powers'. Still, I will read on. Kudos to you.

Reading about a pimp using girls before whoring them out is not what I was after. You nearly fooled me at the beginning. It seemed to be about a couple of lost souls, scared and shy, finally finding each other through the removment of her barrriers through mind control. But no, you had to destroy a really good plot for a sweet story making a man using girls like sluts humiliate them and cuckold the ones that the girls really long for. The only thing you probably missed was for the great hypnotist to get the girls pregnant and let someone else raise the children for him.

I'm so tired of always tune in on a story that seems promising just to find out that the author changes his mind or is not completely honest with the story at the beginning. Instead of a well written "vanilla" stories they turn into a swingers/cuckold/orgy/slut/whore/sharing nightmare. "Give you a gift". Yeah, right. Taking, ravage and completely destroy your beloved is more like it...

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Lonely_Seeker

It's a relatable story and written well enough that time flies when reading it. Thanks for engaging my mind.

Subject says it all, you should have combined the 1st 3 chapters at least. If you are going to get anywhere anytime soon I'll probly quit like most of you are early readers do.

Must admit I get rather uncomfortable when a character is raped, which is what the "Great Menlo" is doing to each girl. I like the premise that he then delivers them to the one that they are really in love with and for that reason alone, I will carry on reading, but rape is rape and actively turns me off.

The story started well with your introducing some interesting characters. But then you went down the Rape/Cuckold route which is a complete turn off. I guess I should have read some of the comments before the story, as it's apparent I won't be the only one dropping this story two chapters in.