All Comments on 'The Adopted Ch. 02'

this is a good read

Just you wait until part III

The story was developing well and it was a five till the way he made the comment to the people that been the only ones to show him concern and he speaks to them that way. It was great how u showed the background to why he was the way he was

When you've suffered PTSD at an early age, you too might be a little unpredictable, emotionally unstable, with a 50% chance of schizophrenia, and occasional moments of becoming a rampaging rage monster

The girls know how to keep him calm, he knows how to keep calm

I'm writing this because I'm the kind of guy who doesn't want a whiny wimpy protagonist who, OH MY GOD INCEST freaks the Hell out, so, I gave him a reason as to why he's not freaked out, he's had worse

Pt. III is a big one, no innuendo intended

I know I'm a little impatient when reading and am not very well with english at times but what was the edgelord in the beginning? Is it a joke? I know that there might be some dramatic tension but I lost my hardon by laughing too hard.

I'm sorry you lost your boner, but fear not, there was a reason why I did that.

You see, I've read a few stories here myself and started wondering why there wasn't a real threatening antagonist.

Either it's a drunk father who doesn't think much of his own family, or the protagonist's own reluctance of taking advantage of their S.O. when they're practically throwing themselves at them.

So I crated a uselessly intelligent rival, an issue that with be resolved in the next installment

As for the humor, well some of these reads tend to be a little too serious, so I add in comic relief to help lighten the mood, because we're all here to have fun right?

I don't even read for the boner,it actually didn't give me one.its your sick metal sarcasm I'm here for,keep up the great work,gonna read the third one now