All Comments on 'The Adventures of Nikki Nipples Nicastro Ch. 02'

This story couldn't get any worse, could it?

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Is this like a school project or was this written while in detention?

Wait I get it now, the first two parts were written as a school literary project and because it was so bad you got detention which gave you time to finish the rest.

Don't worry too much, you have the next four years to polish your writing skills before you graduate from school

Stupid little story badly written with a plot that only a spotty faced thiteen year old could dream up

Sure, while it may not be the most sophisticated story, keep going.

The only way to sum up this sorry little tale

The story is supposed to be written in such a way that the scores go to the right and not the left. Dyslexia rules KO?

The writer has lost touch with reality.

Another masterpiece fresh from the asylum for the mentally insane – it’s got to be from there as the story is way too stupid to be anything else

To some of us this series of stories sums up our wildest fantasies. The wife turned into a slut. A woman who can't resist even the most vile of men, because of a true obsesion with sex. I will be watching with open (something) for the next chapter. Thank you

Is this what passes as erotic writing here? My sympathies to the readers

Just plain bad

Shit, I thought the stories with the most comments would be good stories, instead I come across this pice of crappy writing. It is not erotic nor is it well written. In short a total fucking waste of time

There is so much that could've been done with this theme. Allow the woman to keep her wits about her and let her gradually become comfortable with her new outrageously sexy self. Have her slowly learn to get off on the reactions she spawns in others. Let her husband encourage her behavior, as it obviously benefits him too.<p>

Eventually she becomes a fully sexual woman and everyone's happy. The possibilities are limitless.<p>

Instead, nope, we get a dash of ethnic bigotry and a whole potful of over the top fantasy silliness. Such a shame too, because this writer obviously is a good story teller. This could've really been good...

great....please continue

I love your diversity...are you ever going to write anymore stories featuring black wives/girlfriends getting slutty. I notice you only have one...anyway keep up the good work.

Piece Of Shit

This is really a bad story. One of the previous commentators might be right as the whole story reads as if done by a 13 year old. Whatever happened to the real writers that used to be here? Papa Toad, The Wanderer, Sweet Witch, L A Wicker, Wm Sexspear or numerous others all who have a telling absence from this site. From checking the site at least once a day for new stories I went to maybe once every 2 weeks and even then it is seldom worth the bandwidth wasted in coming here when you find stories of this caliber

You all got it wrong – submitting a story for publication here is very much like learning to ride a bike, first you have the training wheels on and then when you can ride you take the trainers off. Same thing here, first you get crap like this published here and then maybe later on when you have learned to write then you go to another site to publish your stories there

I don’t know if this is a missed opportunity, what I do know is that is should be missed completely

Site must be hard up for stories if they accept crap like this

This story is approved for use by the Department of Defense - no need for rubber hosepipes or beatings. Just read the story out loud and that will be enough to wring a confession out of anybody whether guilty or not. Anything to make it stop.

Dada - crazy hatefull talk.

The stories here have really dropped in quality. I have always tried to see the positive in all things but the only positive thing that I can say about this story is that it was only 4 parts and not 5

Try stamp collecting rather than writing. Not too much chance of fucking up a stamp collection unless you use superglue for mounting

Badly written with a comic plot that only a hormone driven 12 year old could have dreamed up

Is this supposed to be an erotic story? Man oh man, your dictionary got badly mangled somewhere. Someone please post the link to Wikipedia for him to look up the meaning of " erotica "

what is everyone elses problem. great stuff, looking forward to part three.

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... "he should'VE spoken up" instead of "should of". Regards,

Bobbie Sue Kindle

PS: And a Turkish muslime would've probably been circumcised (have no foreskin).

This garbage doesn't even rate the 1* I have given.

All the negative comments read as if they were written by the same bitter troll.

This dick piles the shit higher every time he writes.

pure gold