All Comments on 'The After Dark Club Ch. 01'

Great start of many adventures.

The club is very interesting. Would love to see the Thai shemale meet Danny. In fact you could have a 5 some with all the characters. I write stories on this site as well and enjoyed this one. I think this is 5 stars.

I loved the story, the action, the imagination, the descriptions, and the hot sex. I hated the punctuation or lack thereof - made it difficult for me to follow at times. I certainly want to read more about these characters and the club. I just recommend that you run it by one of the volunteer editors here before submitting the next installment.

xoxo,

Di

Thanks for the kind feedback :)

I am starting chapter 2 of this story this week, as for punctuation etc. i was badly let down by a Literotica Editor who stole my work so am very dubious of such a service.

Keep the good feedback coming and i'll keep writing.