All Comments on 'The Alpha Ch. 02'

It will be interesting to see where you take this one. You have given yourself 500 years of history and the entire were and supernatural population to work with, and that is just to get back to where the original story line was left. Looking forward to seeing what you do with it. Thanks for sharing it with us.

I miss your stories dude! Thanks for coming back! Love Aurion & The alpha!

Well...

That just happened.

Thanks luciu

...very interesting indeed, the way you've mixed different mythologies together to form your own world. It also has me wondering just how much can he truly trust his father and those that sever him? That is of course assuming his father is who think it is; and I have to admit I never made those connections before, but now that you have it raises several questions. I can't wait to see what happens next!!!

His submissive died the most horrible painful death a bidy can auffer and he didn't spare her, his submissive, one thought. His first and only thoughts were about himself and getting blamed. d-bag.

I happen to disagree. The fact that he first thought of the consequences of his sub being murdered, shows that he has a critical enough thought process to effectively be a leader. If he were to freeze up every time one of his associates died, he would quickly get himself, as well as his pack, killed.

the fact that he spent the better part of this chapter in a rage shows how much her death affected him.

That all being said, I like the way the story is suddenly going. I am a little sad about the sub, but plot takes precedence. Keep up the good work.

Loved this chapter, great mix of history and mythology, keep it coming.

KJay15

I admit to being a little unsure of how this chapter would be received due to the huge change in direction but I wanted to be able to show my characters in several different periods instead of simply having a backstory referenced to (as most supernatural stories, especially those dealing with vampires, tend to do.) I know I introduced a lot of info and characters in the chapter but now the vast majority of the regular supporting characters have been introduced. I am still trying to decide how much of the human history I will focus on, since James' empire will be in mundane conflict with human armies while he himself is focused on supernatural foes. I want to thank everyone for their support. If it hadn't been for all the emails I got about the status of my work I would've probably stopped posting after my Cloud malfunction lost most of my work.

PS-if you are interested in seeing me post a darkish Superman story, done in my usual style, let me know. I began writing an alternative story for a friend who was disappointed with Batman vs Superman: Dawn of Justice but after I lost my work I considered rewriting the story as a tale set in the future, with Superman, Wonder Woman and Martian Manhunter being the only Justice Leaguers still alive when the world's governments finally decide to eradicate Metahumans for good after successive generations of heroes prove to be more destructive and uncontrolled than the League had been in it's worst days. Just an idea that keeps popping up in my mind. If it sounds interesting shoot me a nessage and I'all get to work.

It's a very good story. I like the direction this is heading in so far. One thing you might try doing is putting the "inner beast" voice in italics or some special punctuation to help us know that it's him talking.

I am in love with this story and not many authors will I come to begging to continue. Please please continue

When is chapter 3 going to be posted saw the update but it's still not there to read

You've done a very good job with the direction of the story. I enjoy who he is and where this is going. I love the ending of this and find my heart going out to your characters. My only request is to have a black female character😌 (Very curvy and darker toned with a height of 5'8) If you will. (😶Not only because I would fit that description but I like how cultural and in depth your characters are and would love to be able to relate a little more) 😁Either way, I am now a faithful follower and will continue to enjoy this emotional rollercoaster ride immensely and can't wait for your next update.

It was wierd to have chapter one and the first two pages be fast paced sex and then going into another 4 pages of a siege from out of no where. I enjoyed the story but the pacing was a bit off imo. Looking forward to next chapter

I really enjoyed the new angle of the story. Keep them coming.

What a pity this story is unfinished. I agree with iknowwhat, pacing could be better, but the story is still enjoyable. This "save the whole world" type of story is not easy to pull off, but flashing backwards in time may just be the way to make it.

The inner voice needs to be distinguished better, with ' ' or maybe italics. It would also be nice to read more about his vulnerability, now it it is mostly just acknowledged to be there.

this series needs to be completed instead of sitting idle.