All Comments on 'The Assistant Ch. 01'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
Long flashback broke the flow

That long flashback kinda ruined the mood. After putting myself in the professor's place and enjoying her actions, I don't want a sudden jump to her learning how to suck dick on someone else.

Completely broke the suspension for me.

It would be better if that flashback was cut out, and instead the scene was extended and fleshed out more.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

H out and sexy, could been longer and gone to full blown fucking and a threesome orgy. Cunlapping sex maniac Lanc’s UK.

Marklynda2Marklynda211 months ago

A great start to what promises to be a well thought out and written story. I look forward to reading the next chapter. I have added you to my favorites list. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination (memories?) and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.

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I have an active imagination but very little free time! I have at least a half dozen works in progress at any particular time and few more ideas that are only that. With a PhD in science, I do a lot of technical writing, but really enjoy getting my fiction on when I can find a...

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