All Comments on 'The Awkward Moment'

Very nice first effort, I will look for more, congrats, well written and very naughty

A creditable first submission, with which you should be well pleased. It was polite and courteous of you to mention your editor, too; I look forward to reading much more of your work in the future.

4 *s for a great introduction - thank you for sharing your talents with us.

A good premise for a story but moved too fast - however well written it was. It is a shame that you moved from what would have been (in real) an intial introductory meeting where ground rules are laid straight into the hard-core introduction of third parties which in a true D/s relationship would not have gone so quickly. All that said I have to agree with other comments posted - a great first effort!! Keep up the good work and don't rush the scenarios! Good luck.

for your first story i thought you did well, glad you mentioned your editor they do a fantastic job, keep the good work up

As a female, I would be alot more turned on if Trevor was not so CRUEL to her. You can still dominate without total humiliation. Sometimes even more. Let her love & respect you, not just fear.