All Comments on 'The Babysitter Ch. 01'

You are writing an erotica, not a 17th century Literature trying to fill with pointless obsolete/complicated words. Simpler the language, better the sexual attraction to the story. The sentence structure as well as the choice of words simply destroyed what could have been a nice story.

What a stupid critique of a well written story which was a welcome relief from the usual cartoon porn written by the likes of dick the idiot pimp. Read the name of the website. Literotica is just that. Literature. Five stars

for effort.

A fantastic story and a strong start to 2020. Been waiting to see your next story and the fact it's a series starring Billie (who I hoped you'd write) has me looking forward to your next entry. Still my favorite writer on the site and I hope it's a busy year for you on here. (also, if you're taking cameo ideas Emma Roberts as a rival or Carla Gugino as the wife would be amazing)

Appreciate the kind words, everyone. Chapter 2 is about done. To the first comment: Thanks for the input. You probably won’t enjoy my stuff at all, but lots of authors to pick from.

Man this is so good. More of this story and more of Billie!