All Comments on 'The Babysitter's Delight Ch. 03'

'SHONE'!!!!!!!

No such word as 'shined'!

if there's no such word as shined and then what the hell did I just do to my shoes.the the little shoe shine boy he never gets lowdown but he's got the dirtiest job in town bending low at the peoples feet on a windy corner of a dirty street well I ask him while he SHINED my shoes how do you keep from getting the blues. ,,,, now with that being said how do you keep from getting a fucking dictionary you stupid asswipe

The good news is that you can obviously write although there have been some careless spelling and grammatical errors in all three chapters. The bad news is that you have been wasting your budding talent with 'The Babysitter's Delight'. There is no story, no plot---it's just a non-stop orgy which over eight pages becomes totally boring. This whole thing could have been accommodated on one page because beyond that there was nothing worth bothering with. I believe you've got the ability to write something worthwhile so use it.

Ignoring the last idiot, great story altogether.

REALLY awakard at the ending.

This great story needs another chapter.

Totally awesome😍😍😍😍😍 enjoyed each and every chapter. Thanks

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