by JakeRivers
You continue to grow as a writer as evidenced by this masterpiece. It moves from gut wrenching to heart warming fluidly. What a great piece of writing
I find your story so far very enjoyable and intriguing. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Very good writing and reading!
Really a good story, holds my attention. Waiting for part 2, Sounds like an awful lot of truth in this story. Hard to fake real life. Excellent read.
DG Hear
A real author, taking us somewhere most of us haven’t been.
I can only wait to see just where we are going to finish up.
DC
In may or may not be true. But it is certainly truth. DJ understands this aspect of life from the inside out. We see inside the mind and the heart of an alcoholic. After his experiences in life it is easy to understand why he is as he is.
DJ married an understanding of a point in a person's life with a full appreciation of a point in time. Setting this story in the late '40s, with flashbacks to the depression and WW2 made this at once instructional and poignent.
Dynamite Jack is outgrowing porn.
Thank you for a story that I didn't expect to read here. Kept my total attention throughout and am anxiously awaiting the conclusion; although the events described would make numerous stories in themselves. Your writing is impressive.
story to hear from a liberator instead of a survivor.
I'm from the Old World.
I found the switch to the early years a bit awkward, but still an interesting read.
Good luck.
Black Tulip
I would start submitting it to publishers asap...it's that good!
Quite well done - the double / triple flashbacks were challenging tho.
Just don't get a big head or all may be lost
You are appreciated
A very god story,well written and a very sad tell. A await the rest of it
I'm envious of your writing talent and feel fortunate to have surfed to your gift to us. Thanks, Thanks.
I was in the Army in WWII and the Korean War, plus I'm an active EMT, so I've seen more than my share of trauma, and I've also seen what can happen to some people who encounter difficult with those situations. The author captured the emotions of both the initial visual shock and the aftermath with uncanny reality.
The Depression Years weren't fun. We did not have it as bad as in this story, but it wasn't a party. Again, the author was able to relate that era well in modern day terms.
Looking forward to the rest of the story.
... you have seen it. My dad saw it and it haunted him till his passing in 2010.
He could never put it into words he felt was adequate.
Bless him.
It is sometimes easy for we civilians to forget how unnaturally horrible war is. Men who return from combat and cannot function due to psychological problems are not mentally ill, they are mentally wounded. They deserve as much care and respect as a man who lost a leg.
Yea, often the scars to the soul can destroy a man from the inside out, decimating families and relationships. And sadly, if you haven't lived through the spoils of war or conflict, you will never understand the demons that can torment one in the dusky and dark hours.
One thing though, I nearly split my sides reading Formation, it quelled the demons for a while.
Very good so far.