All Comments on 'The Bet Ch. 01'

You've done a really lovely job of character exposition, working in a great deal of personality with some well chosen language. Can't wait to read more!

Your depiction of emotions is vivid. The protagonist’s strong, previously-unquenched desire for Sean is conveyed well.

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Although giving head isn't dominant behavior, I liked the way in which the protagonist asserts herself as follows:

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<i>"Hey! What happened to following my demands to the ‘T’?" I asked teasingly. "If I remember correctly there was supposed to be something around your ankles… and it wasn’t just the mops. Drop ‘em."</i>

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She really evinces her desire well with her aggressive mouth.

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<i>My hand still cradling his erection, I raised myself up and slowly brought my lips to meet his. Opening my mouth, I used my tongue to trace the lines of his lips. They were soft, gentle, and I whimpered with need. Feeling his mouth open beneath mine, I searched for his tongue and found it- a growl nearly escaping, as I tasted him for the first time.</i>

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She is obviously experienced in dealing with men, as she becomes more intimate. And isn't intimacy something women really crave?

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<i>Curling my fingers around his hands, I continued to suckle on his manhood and attempted to draw out the sweet taste of him. When he moaned again, I released him and sought out a more sensitive area. My head dipping below his cock until it found the two balls dangling beneath. Gently drawing one into my mouth, and then the other, I licked and sucked on them in turn, enjoying the feeling as they jostled around my tongue. His breathing getting more rapid with each lick and suck, my breathing accelerating to match his.</i>

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Do women get a thrill out of having a man’s gonads in their mouths? What is it that they would enjoy?