All Comments on 'The Birthday Present'

I don't even know where to begin. This is some weird crap you got going on here, jimbo. But I guess to each his own.

Not my cup of tea, however.

Although the smoking fetish does not appeal to me, the story made compulsive reading and held me enthralled. The spell was broken, however, when the mother started "convulsing with organisms." Yuk!

They're still trying to sell smoking as sophisticated and sexy, even on an erotica site? This was just plain foul. Each time she blew a bunch of disgusting smoke into someone's mouth, I wanted to slap that cigarette out of her hand and put it out on her forehead. Each time we were subjected to a description of ASHES IN HIS MOUTH...fuck, I wanted to hurl. Who in the fuck still thinks smoking is sexy? Yeah, enjoy mom choking down those unfilitered cancer sticks. Enjoy her horrible breath, smelly hair, wrinkled skin, nasty teeth and, especially, her painful, premature death. Nothing like watching someone you claim to love cutting their life short, but not until they've first suffered...and suffered...and suffered.

I give you a perfect score, not because I share in all the things that you find erotic (then again there are only rare erotic matching interests) but because of your nice style and the clever wording. Keep on writing.

The fetish was alright,but the best thing in the story was the sex between mom and son.That was really hot.Thanks for the story...........Rich

Looking forward to the rest of your work. Thanks very much!

You're not without skill in writing - although your characters are mere puppets, without a three-dimensional human element - but your carelessness/ignorance (whichever it is) about spelling and punctuation made this a pain to read.

Betta blew the story for me. it's a gay story YUK 1 star

The nurse blew this story for me ,,, yuck ,, not a good story