All Comments on 'The Blue Necklace Ch. 03'

I gave this a lower rating due to the British slang. Since, not everyone who speaks English will understand the common slang. You should learn to write using the words that the slang represents. Such as clothes instead of clobber. And what is a tizwiz? The style most authors use is a more proper language for narration and slang and incorrect language can be used inside quotes. The style of language used inside quotes will determine the level of education of the characters. Speech patterns are learned from both family and friends but they can be unlearned, as well. You did indicate Jenny and Tom are college educated. I do believe universities refrain from teaching slang in their English classes.