All Comments on 'The Bonds of Trust'

Ok, I am stupid.... Do what???

It took me a few days to get through the whole thing. The ending was great.

Thank you, Anon.

I agonized over the ending here at the house for 2 days. To find peace I finally just ran a double line after "Renee." and portended that Matty had just mouthed it. That he had not said "Renee" aloud. I then proceeded to add another 5 chapters of pure pablum. I found my peace then. I chopped off those ridiculous five chapters, proof read it a final time and submitted it to Literotica as it exists now. I've never looked back.

russell-ville-man

newlywed sach hot storyhafe way true frist page I was hot and wet... it,s frist story I have read of yours look forward to more like it TY leann xxxxxxx

I don't get the ending what's Renee?? And what did Lori want him to do?

...Its the worst thing I've ever read on Lit. With only one tag to go by and an interesting if somewhat tiresome first page that drew me in, I started off thinking this was a erotic romantic newlywed story about a gender confused young man and an ex-Mistress wife that wanted to prove she cared for him anyway... great, right down my alley. Then I ran headlong into the trainwreck of page two, and the writing got worse from there. Chapter 7 was where he needed to use the safeword, not 30 chapters into this thing... and after all of that, all he finally freaks about is she calls him "faggot"? Beside it being a terrible storyline, it desperately needs editing, and even more, it needs so much help with the dialog, sometimes its hard to know where the dialog begins and ends. And then it was so long with its repeating themes of whether to trust her (um... no?). Its just finger down the throat awful.

This story hurt my soul.

I can hear my heart beating, my blood boiling, and rage coursing through my body.

This was just getting worse by the minute the way she treated him. after a few pages I just speed read through everything to see if it gets better - it really does not.

And I don't even get what actually made him call her middle name.

I would have ages ago.